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whiskey
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0 posted 2003-05-22 02:21 AM


Hey you in there
Stop kicking me about
Im not a football
For you to be throwing me about
Dont get me wrong
I love it all
The movements inside felt
Just a little time
I beg to be spared
To sleep through the night
All day I sit and wonder
When next you will move again
But no little one
You show me nothing then
As soon as I lay down my head
Close my eyes to sleep
Open become yours
To play, kick and punch about
Inside me
Three more months
And worse it will get
Im told by everyone
God is preparing me
For when here you be
Awake at night
Needing me

[This message has been edited by whiskey (05-22-2003 02:22 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Julie Nelson - All Rights Reserved
lost_star
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1 posted 2003-05-22 02:25 AM


Beautiful poem, I really like the way you wrote this. Very cute!
Richy
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2 posted 2003-05-22 03:24 AM




Hi Whiskey, I guess I didn’t pay as much attention to the title of your poem as I should have. And I thought it was about an abusive relationship...lol

Which is nothing to laugh about, it’s just that I was glad to finally realize that it was about a, “mother with child.”

Your last part:

“Three more months
And worse it will get
Im told by everyone
God is preparing me
For when here you be
Awake at night
Needing me”

Is really, so true...

Whiskey, I wish you and your baby, the best of luck!


Richy


passing shadows
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3 posted 2003-05-22 03:38 AM



Dark Angel
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4 posted 2003-05-22 05:51 AM


A beautiful tender write, done so beautifully.

Maree

ladypisces76
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5 posted 2003-05-22 07:38 AM


very sweet and great.I wish you all the luck with your baby,they are all such sweet miracles.
Margherita
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6 posted 2003-05-22 08:44 AM


Dear Whiskey this is really sweet. You will be given all the energy you need ... for "little one" is LOVE.
Thank you for sharing your precious moments.
Love, Margherita

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7 posted 2003-05-22 09:12 AM


Lovely write...brought back some tender memories.
Thank you.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sven
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8 posted 2003-05-22 12:30 PM


I can see this picture. . . yes. . .done very well. . .

excellent work. . .good to have you back again. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

jwesley
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9 posted 2003-05-22 01:25 PM


Great write my friend... can't claim to know the feeling but I do know the feeling after the womb and guess if I had it to do all over again...I would.  I would sit up with them, rock them, feed them, change their potty mess and all the rest, just for the love they give in return.

'Course there is all the other garbage that goes with them... now on second thought...
yeah, I still would...

May you be as blessed with them as I was...

jwesley

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10 posted 2003-05-22 03:47 PM



Yep...they sleep all day
and play all night!  Hey Mom...
it's a CLUE!  LOL...

take it easy and nap when you can!

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2003-05-22 06:27 PM


A very sweet poem...I hope the kicks are more gentle as your time nears.

M

QjQ
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12 posted 2003-05-22 09:10 PM


thanks for shareing your expereinces with us!!!  

QjQ

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13 posted 2003-05-22 11:39 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwwwww, I can understand sometimes our children need their moms and dads so much they can feel kicked around but then we love them even more as we wash their tears away and see the sparkles in their eyes! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Julie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Ivy Rose
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14 posted 2003-05-23 01:13 AM


Whiskey...What a precious and loving poem about the baby soon to make his or her presence known in this world. A delightful read. ***Ivy Rose
BluesSerenade
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15 posted 2003-05-23 01:22 AM


There is nothing else to compare to the movement inside...how soon we forget and wish to feel again, the magic of life.

I share your joy in poetry,  and the child that is yours.  

Take care of you both~

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16 posted 2003-05-25 01:00 AM



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17 posted 2003-05-25 01:39 AM


Julie, this is a very sweet and tender write.
Thank  you for sharing this with us. I hope that
you and "Little one" will stay well and healthy.
Hugs,  
Ethel

JilGirl
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18 posted 2003-05-25 06:18 AM


Only a mother knows!
This brings back memories ~~ three times!
Thanks for this tender trip!

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

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