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serenity blaze
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0 posted 05-21-2003 01:14 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Chaste--
and grace! I spied her there
gathered in her robes of moon
among the ancient rocks erode
just below foot-flower'd dance
bells to hearken puerile
impulsive child of whim, I chanced
upon seductive sweet perfume.

Haste--
too late I spat the wine
amazed of poison'd nectar's taste
shadows played across the sun
excess tantalizing tongue
visions formed afore my eye
and still I clung to my belief
unable to concede her truth
that never heaven did exist--
I fell into the dreamless pit.

Lambaste--
O sophomoric wretch!
the pale priest then appeared to me.
Mocking of my God he wore
the garments of devout.
He curled a finger of accuse,
a motion that denied refuse.
Commanding in this beckoning
I was summoned to the depths
of my immortality.

Abased--
I bathed in feasted bile--
the knowledge of my own repast
that which once I called sustence
became the refuse of the pit.
And yes, O Death I called for her,
and she answered, "Live through this."
Tears which once were my release
burned a path through skin of cheek
revealing in grotesque display
all my weary head contained.
No. There was not mercy there.
The pale priest laughed.
He finally voiced
the final word of my deny,
assault upon my ear--
He bent in wicked lip of curl
and whispered to me:

"Choice."

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-21-2003 01:29 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 05-21-2003 01:16 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


You tell stories...
and touch souls...
Janet Marie
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Chaste--
and grace! I spied her there
gathered in her robes of moon
among the ancient rocks erode
just below foot-flower'd dance
bells to hearken puerile
impulsive child of whim, I chanced
upon seductive sweet perfume.

Haste--
too late I spat the wine
amazed of poison'd nectar's taste
shadows played across the sun
excess tantalizing tongue
visions formed afore my eye
and still I clung to my belief
unable to concede her truth
that never heaven did exist--
I fell into the dreamless pit.

==================================


damned?
nope....more like damn!!!!
have I told you lately that I crave your rhymes divine?
Ahhh... ..this is a melancholy masterpiece...shades of Poe and Shakes...
your grasp of vocab and rhyme, of poetry overall just blows me mothy mind

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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3 posted 05-21-2003 01:22 PM       View Profile for Brad Majors   Email Brad Majors   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Brad Majors

very nice!
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 05-21-2003 01:24 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

serenity
The voice of choice rings in my ear
Yet still I know not how to steer.
Excellent
serenity blaze
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5 posted 05-21-2003 02:23 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Thank you Sunshine, Jan, Brad and my huggable seymour.

And I was just reminded of something Janis Joplin once said. "I don't write songs--I just make 'em up." So if I can paraphrase my apparent sister of self-destruction--

I don't write poems--I just make 'em up.

Thanks for reading...love you all!
wranx
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6 posted 05-21-2003 02:37 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Well, you done made up a fine one here witch.

You gets better n' better, ya do! You are wearing yourself...well.

~yeti
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7 posted 05-21-2003 02:44 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Excellent Serenity!
Now..this is one I would love to hear you read aloud!!
Brava!!  Into my library with this keeper.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Dark Angel
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8 posted 05-21-2003 05:56 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

This is an amazing "made up" poem m'dear and so are YOU!



Maree
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  enjoyed

A thought from a stranger is cherished,
A thought from a friend is treasured

JingleBear
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10 posted 05-21-2003 06:35 PM       View Profile for JingleBear   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JingleBear

Beautiful!
Earth Angel
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If JM would so allow, I would like to echo her reply to your masterpiece! (I know that appears rather lazy of me, but she voiced my sentiments exactly!)

Warm hugs,
Linda
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12 posted 05-21-2003 07:44 PM       View Profile for KristieSue   Email KristieSue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit KristieSue's Home Page   View IP for KristieSue

amazing...simply amazing.  I wish I could write with such eloquence...

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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13 posted 05-21-2003 08:50 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

What JM said....in spades!!  Nicely done
Ser... excellent!!
serenity blaze
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14 posted 05-21-2003 09:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze



Guess who slept with Poe last night...

smiles and thanks.

Ya'll are great!
brian sites
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15 posted 05-21-2003 10:23 PM       View Profile for brian sites   Email brian sites   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian sites

you are at THAT point

wow....this is
powerful
and yes
gothicky too
gothicky?
sheesh

you can do anything you set your mind to
garysgirl
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16 posted 05-22-2003 03:47 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Yep, Karen, you can do just that....what all the above said.

I was off line for a while today, but lookey at what an excellently written "made-up" poem that our sweet little Serenity posted for our eyes and mind to feast upon!! Goodness, I wish I could make-up some as good as this, my friend.  

Heart hugs to you from me,  
Ethel
iliana
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wow!
 
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