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The Room of Chairs

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Martie
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The Room of Chairs

Tell me why you weep I heard
from the quiet space

turning turning where

I see you sometimes in despair
so said the room

a stop and then around again
when is voice a song I longed
to see all mixed up rocking course
within the quiet a discourse
unwept was I in curious glean
to find that dust can talk   I clean

now shine is on the arm of rocker
the fragrance of orange a sign perhaps
and I see the smooth of years not harm
and feel the hold of rocking arms

delighted with the wood and grain
I listen lost in past some pain
where girl dark curled leaned into pale
of how to trust when cushion failed
to comfort stripped the bones now matted
of fabric thin and holes not tatted

Tell me tell me why you laugh I heard
from other side of room

I swung around in much delight the room
fell suddenly into sight
with sound like children ocean tuned
and surf of love swept out the gloom

Then perfume became the air
where the ancient set of time
rocked with me and mother mine
back and forth in wooden boat of chair
her arms like ropes around me there

Tell me why you weep I heard
from the quiet space

turning turning where

I see you sometimes in despair
so said the room

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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now shine is on the arm of rocker
the fragrance of orange a sign perhaps
and I see the smooth of years not harm
and feel the hold of rocking arms

Do you realize that you not only bring back memories, but you make them as well!!

Martie   Hugs~

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Oh, this is beautiful....such heart-rending emotion in these simple things, and who but Martie would find it for us?

Thank you, sweet lady. You're a marvel.

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Bill Charles
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Martie - you're just amazing with your writings...

BC
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"So said the room."

This is beautiful Martie

The "room" is alive in this.

Ed...

[This message has been edited by wranx (05-21-2003 01:06 AM).]

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*smiles and nods* I'm with them..most definately..I saw the room alive in this...sad...*sigh*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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unwept was I in curious glean
to find that dust can talk   I clean

now shine is on the arm of rocker
the fragrance of orange a sign perhaps
and I see the smooth of years not harm
and feel the hold of rocking arms

delighted with the wood and grain
I listen lost in past some pain
where girl dark curled leaned into pale
of how to trust when cushion failed
to comfort stripped the bones now matted
of fabric thin and holes not tatted

Tell me tell me why you laugh I heard
from other side of room

I swung around in much delight the room
fell suddenly into sight
with sound like children ocean tuned
and surf of love swept out the gloom

==============================


if your walls could talk...they would recite the poetry they witness daily radiating from you.

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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I too, have experienced this--and you have expressed it beautifully--and with an ethereal, surrealistic touch of graceful writing...

Lovely, Martie, simply lovely.

Loving hugs,
Linda
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If one were to take Martie's poems,
and sideslip thoughts of fancy
into weave of stuttered dream,
where one roams between REM and light,
teetering between
love
and
loss
one might find Martie there,
gathering words
for poetry
such as this.


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amazing...very mentally visually

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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MartieSis~
The title said, "Come in gentle friend. I have a song to share."

I did ... and it did !

My, my ... the heartfelt layering of this piece will stay with this fervent admirer for a long, long time~

Thank you ... I am so very glad that you share~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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rocked with me and mother mine
back and forth in wooden boat of chair
her arms like ropes around me there


This makes me think of my own Mother. She has rocked me and hugged me many times. She is such an affectionate person, hugging people she doesn't even know, sometimes. Her arms have felt like ropes around me many times. I've felt them when she wasn't even around me, before. If I hadn't I would have surely fell so far that I would have never gotten up again.

Martie, sweet Lady, I love the titles you choose for your poetry, too. I could picture a room full of chairs in a cicle with all of us PIPsters sitting around laughing and talking. I'll bet your home is very inviting to your guests, sweet Lady, just as your poetry is.
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shaking my head, wondering how you do it
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Martie - you poems help to hear the voices of life - of all the wonderful and challenging things we experience.  I know you are so special and you do poetry so well yet I still find myself amazed and transformed by your words - Paul
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You've done it again Martie, you've gone and knocked me of my chair!

This is absolutey stunning m'friend.

Maree

oh I'm keeping this.
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I've read this three times before and haven't really had the time to take and actually appreciate this poem enough to give you a worthy reply.  I'm sorry it's taken me so long, I really do think this poem is amazing and deserves a response from me.

First of all, the way it's written.  You are a flawless poet, I detect nothing out of place, your whole poem is beautiful and meaningful... it's as though you wrote this with careful precision, one word at a time...

As for the surreal, involving imagery... wow, I'm just fascinated with this scene you've created.  

quote:
I see you sometimes in despair
so said the room


Fantastic... another something for my private library.  Thank you for this, Martie.  I'd love to see more of this sort of poetry from you.

Parasite

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~Percy Bysshe Shelley

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Each line, a fine wine...
How beautiful your soul. TD
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(big hugggsssssssss) I have seen this hidden heartache too, sweet friend, don't know if it's my third eye or my ESP but whenever I see someone just sitting alone in a quiet room I always have to judge the persons eyes! (sad sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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19 posted 05-23-2003 08:47 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Martie, your writing just never stops growing...beautifully written, my friend.

jwesley
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Painfully brilliant imagery.

Sorry I missed this before.
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