I've read this three times before and haven't really had the time to take and actually appreciate this poem enough to give you a worthy reply. I'm sorry it's taken me so long, I really do think this poem is amazing and deserves a response from me.
First of all, the way it's written. You are a flawless poet, I detect nothing out of place, your whole poem is beautiful and meaningful... it's as though you wrote this with careful precision, one word at a time...
As for the surreal, involving imagery... wow, I'm just fascinated with this scene you've created.
I see you sometimes in despair
so said the room
Fantastic... another something for my private library. Thank you for this, Martie. I'd love to see more of this sort of poetry from you.
Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.
~Percy Bysshe Shelley