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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2003-05-20 04:11 PM


The Sun ... has always risen and fallen in silent splendor ...
The Moon ... has always lit up the night with it's luminous kiss
The Sky ... has always held us in celestial wonder ...
The Stars ... have always promised us our every wish

All I had ever wished for ... was to know a feeling like this ...


Emerald Equinox


You whispered across my chasm of loneliness ...
reaching out for my hand, offering me a path paved
in the cadenced content of your company.
Across distance and darkness our fingers laced,
an entwining embrace lingering on in memory's trace
far beyond the fathoms of both time and space.
Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.

From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone.

Sated in our sacred surrender ...
surrounded by sunset's retreating reprise,
we were awed by her ardent attempts to
compete with the heat our union apprised.
Enraptured in her embered envy of our
infusing intensity ... hued in quiet violet ... she
tried to hide in her lavender drenched disguise.

Turquoise tinctured twilight summoned
night's indigo invitation in silent testify.
Still, the scene that the horizon painted
'cross her prismed canvas of satin skies ...
paled as it failed to justify the beauty that I just
witnessed in the eventide of your emerald eyes.

Drapes of dusking darkness veiled the
sable star stained sky. Satiated we levitated
across midnight's mantle of ebony caress ...
mercifully rescuing me from the drowning
depths of my relentless unrequitedness.

Resistless tendencies aligned our eclipsing ecstasy,
consummating our commitment 'cross constellations of infinity.
Your beckoning brilliancy denied gravity's grasp ...
pulling my tides ... phasing my moons.
Wishing upon your shooting stars ...
kissing away your sorrow's scars.

Your jade tears flowed through my own lost years
saturating me in second chances and inspiration.
We loved a lifetime in our taken too soon sequestered
season of your butterfly promised equinox.



~*~


"Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be ...
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy"

~*~

"We shared some special nights together
We said we'd watch the morning rise
But when the sun was all around us
It wasn't nothing I hadn't seen in your eyes"

Vertical Horizon

~*~

revised by request ...
thank you for finding this one special



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1 posted 2003-05-20 04:23 PM



I remember...
and nodding my head
in quiet approval
for the poet who asked
that this be reposted...

'tis a good day
for such a repost...

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2 posted 2003-05-20 04:23 PM


Beautiful..oh my gosh I can't seem to grasp the words..sorry..

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

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3 posted 2003-05-20 04:30 PM


I am glad you have posted another poem, Janet Marie. I have missed reading your poetry lately!

This is another beautiful poem. I loved your choice of words and imagery.

~El Campeador

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4 posted 2003-05-20 04:35 PM


I think this sounds even sweeter as a solo. *S* Your words paint vivid images... and you know I love the alliteration. *S*

indigo invitation...

suthern's off to dream. *G*

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5 posted 2003-05-20 04:38 PM






(smiles) Yay!!! Oh Janet, I'm so happy you once again shared this gem with us all, sweet friend, I truly think love is a syzygy and truly helps make all things progress and align constellations that are perfect in their luster! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is a timeless treasure, it is OK to blush for there truly is shades of magenta in Andromeda, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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***Shakira***

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6 posted 2003-05-20 04:46 PM


'From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone.'

Damn, I love that last line.....
Nice surprise this afternoon Jams!

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7 posted 2003-05-20 04:47 PM


Wow, lot's of wonderful imagery here.

"Drapes of dusking darkness veiled the
sable star stained sky. Satiated we levitated
across midnight's mantle of ebony caress ...
mercifully rescuing me from the drowning
depths of my relentless unrequitedness."

Very, very nice.
sg

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8 posted 2003-05-20 04:53 PM


very powerful.....

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9 posted 2003-05-20 05:46 PM


JM,
Well I don't have emerald eyes and never asked for this revise. But then again it's one I never read and wish it was for me instead. I have shed tears but ones of brine not jade and these dragon tears I would trade for just one walk within this glade. This garden of wonders that you write
and perhaps to spend the night.
Yours Randy  

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10 posted 2003-05-20 06:04 PM


nice
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11 posted 2003-05-20 07:22 PM


I don't recall reading this...Glad someone did, and that you reprised it.
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12 posted 2003-05-20 09:12 PM


You are sooooooooooooooooooooo good!
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Beautiful as a 'caress of palms'..oh my!

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14 posted 2003-05-20 10:43 PM


This is as exquisite as you are!
Amazing write JM..just amazing!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

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dancing with you in the summer rain~

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15 posted 2003-05-20 11:03 PM


Well Ms. butterfly, it's so good to see you posting again.  This is too beautiful for words...somtimes your writing blows me away so much so that I don't have anything clever to say.  Yes, you ARE a true poet, this is an amazing write and I'm saving this~

Mothy hugs to ya girl
take care,
Melissa~

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16 posted 2003-05-20 11:17 PM


Across distance and darkness our fingers laced,
an entwining embrace lingering on in memory's trace
far beyond the fathoms of both time and space.
Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.

From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone.



OOOHHHH, this is so good, Janet Marie.
I don't have words to describe just how
beautiful I think it is.  
Hugs,
Ethel

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17 posted 2003-05-21 12:56 PM


Your beckoning brilliancy denied gravity's grasp ...
pulling my tides ... phasing my moons.
Wishing upon your shooting stars ...
kissing away your sorrow's scars.

This is very special Janet Marie,  and so are you.  The feeling is majestic in all it's natural beauty.  And always you add such sparkle to the stars and wear the moon as your halo, glowing unlike any other..... truly, you take the essence of poetry to a higher plane.

So pretty is your ~blue~ JM~

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18 posted 2003-05-21 08:09 AM


Kari ... and its always a good day for sun. TY

Ceinwyn ... thank you for the beautiful *S*

El_Campeador ... what a sweet thing to say..thank you for missing my work...my muse is far and few between of late. TY very much. *S*

Ruth ... me thinks I alliterated till I hurt something LOL ..and you me girlie, have a very good memory ( blonde and all)   yes, this was previously posted as part of a duet with Brian Madden from open 16. Im glad it worked as a solo effort as well.
thank you Ruth, very much.

Noah ... your enthusiasm is a "syzygy" ... *wink*  thank you so much kind poet sir, you are as faithful and constant as the sky.

Dunc ... well if I surprised you..then I must be doing something right...
think of it as the "moth difference"  heh   thank you me fave porch puppy.

SimplyGold ... thank you for the wow, so glad you enjoyed.

nobody ... thanks for the powerful reply...welcome to poetry land.

Sy-babes ... your eyes of wise are my reprise and your rhymed replies send me mothy heart into a state of sighs. Come with me and we will fly the skies, tis there we will be free like the butterflies.   

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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19 posted 2003-05-21 08:11 AM


Vandana ... hello there...thank you for stopping by.

wranx ... thank you kind poet sir, so nice of you to say so. *S*

Deerone ...  who told you??? what have you heard?? its all a rumor  LOL thank you
my sweet spammy guy

Sharon ... thank you for the oh my ... glad you enjoyed the caress

Nancy ... thank you so much me girlie, for the exquisitely generous reply.

Melis ... your words are just fine ... thank you girlie for such a sweet,enthusiastic  response. mothy hugs right back atcha

Ethel ... your words were beautifully sincere.. thank you dear poetess. *S*

Lori ... you humble me with such a sweet and lovely reply ... this was written for a special muse and I cant take the credit... he inspired things I never knew possible in my pen ... butterfly inspiration..its as good as it gets. Thank you groovy girl for your kindness. Youre blues are a brilliant hue


thank you everyone for the kind words to my work.



I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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20 posted 2003-05-21 11:24 AM


Janet Marie

It is very special...and beautiful with feeling as only you can be and write...and that's amazing...because you are special too!


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21 posted 2003-05-21 11:27 AM


Grumble...pushing button again because my reply didn't bump this to the top where it needs to be.
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22 posted 2003-05-21 12:29 PM


We are both on AOL and sometimes the anti-bump software thinks we are the same. It happends when I reply to you and KA too..
anyway..thank you for the lovely response sweets.

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23 posted 2003-05-21 02:48 PM


JM~

and then I read you.....I breathe you in exhale softly, all too, because I, know.....which tides, and moon and jade" these words come from.....ever lovely poetess.....thank you....


Lauren~


Through the darkness
I can see your light
And you will always shine
And I can feel your heart in mine

I will remember you


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24 posted 2003-05-21 03:17 PM


Hey you---where did this come from?

Somebody been giving you witch lessons?


"You whispered across my chasm of loneliness ...
reaching out for my hand, offering me a path paved
in the cadenced content of your company.
Across distance and darkness our fingers laced,
an entwining embrace lingering on in memory's trace"

And yes, "As above, so below"

so it follows, "As below is above..." grin.



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25 posted 2003-05-22 08:01 AM


Lauren ... yes sweet poetess... I know you know... and its in that knowing that I find quiet comfort. Thank you me lovely butterfly sis.


KA ... ya know I love the below  
thank you me twin...(IKTYKTK)


thanks to all for your kind replies.

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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26 posted 2003-05-22 09:10 AM


JanetMarie~
Soooooooo much in this to 'like'~
And I do !

'Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.'


The internal rhyme becomes you, ya' know ?

Just lovely~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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27 posted 2003-05-22 10:26 AM


Janet Marie - and indeed, this writing is very special. It's most loving...

BC

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28 posted 2003-05-22 10:32 AM


Janet...

This is SO VERY BRILLIANT

but you knew that already didn't you?

regards to you my friend,
sudhir

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29 posted 2003-05-22 01:01 PM


JM... you absolutely enchant me.

quote:
The Sun ... has always risen and fallen in silent splendor ...
The Moon ... has always lit up the night with it's luminous kiss
The Sky ... has always held us in celestial wonder ...
The Stars ... have always promised us our every wish


OK... how the hell do you do THAT?  That is SUCH a cool preface to your poem, I can't even read the rest of it yet before hitting "reply" so I can type this out.  That is just stunning, I just savoured that little bit on the end of my tongue for a little while and let it really sink in... it's so true, ever since the beginning of time.  

It's funny, too, last night I was reading this part in Paradise Lost where Eve is laying down about to fall asleep and she asks Adam why God made the stars so beautiful when they were meant for a time when no eyes would be open to see them.  This reminded me of that.  Yes, the sky has always held wonders for us...

Woo... now I'm all pumped to read your poem.  You're brilliant, JM, you know that?  

Janet Marie... has always floored me with her brain-numbing imagery.

quote:
Emerald Equinox


Yep.... I think you probably picked that title yourself.  Always with the alliterations.  

quote:
You whispered across my chasm of loneliness ...


Wait... how come you still need a killer opening line after that preface of yours?  Save it, damn you!

quote:
reaching out for my hand, offering me a path paved
in the cadenced content of your company.
Across distance and darkness our fingers laced,
an entwining embrace lingering on in memory's trace
far beyond the fathoms of both time and space.
Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.


Thought I told you to lay off poor old winter for a while?  

Even the image alone is poetry.  A hand reaching out and touching another, through "distance and darkness," and your eyes closing and sighing in complete relief as all the cold wintery frost falls away.  Wow... that just absolutely tickles me... where do you come up with this stuff?  Reminds me of that painting I've never seen but I've seen depicted a million times, with the naked guys reaching out and touching their hands just barely.  Can't remember what that's from exactly.  

That little hint.  "Lingering on in memory's trace."  Is that to say that you're not actually reaching out to this person, but remembering them?  If so, BRAVO on writing the most unique description of remembering someone that I've ever read.

I almost didn't even notice that you rhymed, either... I just did when I was looking up at it again.  

quote:
From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone.


Nice... very nice image.  You said you wanted help with the line breaks, and I think I notice the slightly awkward break between the first and second line... but I don't think you could have put it in much of a better place than that.  When in doubt, it's best to go by the length of the lines, in my opinion... so, just keep it as is.

You became my oxygen?  Sweet, but it's been said before... I still like how you've used it, the phrasing is clever.  "Consensually overcome" is really cool.

quote:
Sated in our sacred surrender ...
surrounded by sunset's retreating reprise,
we were awed by her ardent attempts to
compete with the heat our union apprised.
Enraptured in her embered envy of our
infusing intensity ... hued in quiet violet ... she
tried to hide in her lavender drenched disguise.


This stanza itself is a masterpiece, and a perfect example of your complete control over alliterations, sounds, internal rhymes... even a pinch of meter to accentuate the flow of it a little bit, which you might have even done unconsciously somehow.  I love "her ardent attempts to compete with the heat our union apprised."  I almost typed "that our union apprised" because that would make it completely anapestic, but I guess you don't want to rephrase yourself at all, nor do you want to tease me with illusions of structure.  You much prefer the scattering of surprise sounds and random rhyme, don't you?

Watching the sunset together and being in awe of it, but still calling it an "attempt to compete" with your own experience... that's powerful, what can I say?  I love it...

quote:
Turquoise tinctured twilight summoned
night's indigo invitation in silent testify.
Still, the scene that the horizon painted
'cross her prismed canvas of satin skies ...
paled as it failed to justify the beauty that I just
witnessed in the eventide of your emerald eyes.


This is a treat of colours, JM... a beautiful bouquet of shades and hues.  I'm fully impressed, this one has to be my favourite stanza overall... just the same as the other, the way you go into a detailed description of something that does not compare, is really nifty... how you turn it around in the end and say, but then I look in your eyes and it's all nothing... heh, I really have a lot to learn from the way you write poetry, don't I?

quote:
Drapes of dusking darkness veiled the
sable star stained sky. Satiated we levitated
across midnight's mantle of ebony caress ...
mercifully rescuing me from the drowning
depths of my relentless unrequitedness.


Again I can see your concern with the line breaks, but I have to say that if anyone reads this like I do, they won't notice anything wrong with it.  Purely visual, purely for the sake of looking nice and even.  If you read it through as one sentence (which I tend to do with your poetry), instead of completing a thought with each line, it's pure poetry... I wouldn't change it, to be honest.  Line breaks don't have enough to do with your style for them to be so important.

I love your control over the imagery in this poem.  From sunset to twilight to midnight... you do the seasons thing very well and I'd just wondered recently if you did the day and night thing too... and so I see, you can do that beautifully as well.  Just as I thought.  

Again, your style in this stanza is so solid and well-expressed... caress and unrequitedness tied together perfectly, "satiated, we levitated," is just incredible... I'm loving this.

quote:
Resistless tendencies aligned our eclipsing ecstasy,
consummating our commitment 'cross constellations of infinity.
Your beckoning brilliancy denied gravity's grasp ...
pulling my tides ... phasing my moons.
Wishing upon your shooting stars ...
kissing away your sorrow's scars.


Especially in the last lines, I just know you could do meter so easily if you really wanted to.  It's naturally flowing, the last couple of lines especially, as I said... and "brilliancy," you invented that word, didn't you?  Who do you think you are, Shakespeare?  Well, it works here... so I'm not complaining.  The cosmic imagery is fantastic here.  As night falls and the stars come into view, you sit back and contemplate the function of the entire planet and all the cosmos... pulling your tides, phasing your moons... you've taken this poem to a whole new level in this stanza and I'm in complete awe... very, very nice work.

quote:
Your jade tears flowed through my own lost years
saturating me in second chances and inspiration.
We loved a lifetime in our taken too soon sequestered
season of your butterfly promised equinox.


Hmm... I'd rather it say "taken-too-soon" so the sentence is easier to read.  And here's one place I would alter the line breaks just a bit... so "sequestered season" was in the same line.  The butterfly seems out of nowhere, too... was it something from your collaboration?  As a single work, I don't think the butterfly fits in with the rest of the imagery.  But you said you didn't want to change any of the words, so I'll respect that...

I like the two possible meanings of "we loved a lifetime," though.  That's really neat...

This is a beautifully done poem, JM, and I think you really ought to be proud of yourself... like I said, there's very little I would change at all about the poem's presentation.  Your style of writing is flowing and doesn't demand much attention paid to line breaks except for the sake of not spanning the page from left to right.  So, keeping it visually even as you've chosen to do is probably the best course of action.

Thanks for the opportunity to read this one.  Another entry into my private library to savour later on when I want to learn a bit more about this craft of yours...

Brian

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~Percy Bysshe Shelley

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30 posted 2003-05-22 08:02 PM


I just got home and have to catch up, and will be back but I wanted to thank you all,
real quick right now...
and Brian... youre the best...I owe ya
TY for your very cool reply...
I'll be back said the moth.

I refuse to accept that mankind is so tragically bound to the starless midnight of racism & war that the daybreak of peace can never be reality.
MLK

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31 posted 2003-05-23 12:48 PM


Marge ... thank you for finding things to like in this,
and Im glad the rhyme works, cuz even when I intend to write free verse, the rhyme just seems to find its way along with the allits and ellips.  thank you.

Bill, thank you poet sir for findng this one special...it was written for a very special person who inspire me in ways I never thought possible. thanks for stopping by.

Sud ... if YOU say its brilliant, then who am I to argue. LOL
thank you groovy guy for your luminescent reply *S*

Brian ... Brian, Brian, Brian ... Your reply overwhelms this moth while painting the biggest smile on my face. I, of course adore your compliments and generousity to my work,  How could I not be humbled by such wonderful things being attached to my writing, BUT over and above that...what I admire and adore about it all is your obvious love and appreciation of poetry...you get excited about it...you feel the words, you let the poetry take you there and you celebrate the inspiration.And you understand the process behind the words...you read between the lines and you take the time to study the poem, to discover the work and technique, and you let the writer know you see the work that went into the writing. Ya got POET EYES and thats a very cool thing. Thank you so much for giving this one so much time, for "lingering" here and sharing so much. I agree with what you said about the line breaks. And I had to smile cuz you found the exact one I was talking about in the email, (where I didnt want to break up allits)
As for the rhyme in this... well.... honestly, when I sat down to write it...
I intended for it to be a free verse...but as I told Ron.. :"rhyme happends"
This was wrote as tribute to someone very special and I wanted it to be "grand" or over the top....so I thought what better way than internal rhymes and alliteration.
I know this one might have an overload of them..but I wanted to stay true to the theme.  I wrote the preface poem after I had written the other part...it seemed like a perfect way to set the poem up with its ethereal theme. And I am sooooo jazzed by how much you enjoyed it
As for the butterfly symbol, yes..I agree its not in with the rest of poems theme, but its an intrical part of the connection between the person it was wrote for and I.
This was wrote back in Open 16 and many of my poems from the time I came here, are about him, and many include the butterfly theme and metaphor. It was the symbol he gave me to help me accept that he would soon be taking flight from this world and so after he passed away, the butterfly became the heart of my poetry.
He was an extraordinary man and an exceptional poet in his own right and it was because of him that I picked up my pen after almost 20 years of not writing.
I honestly cant take the credit for the poems he inspired in me...often it was like he was writing through me. Thank you Bri...for all you teach me and all that you give of yourself to my poetry. Youre a groovy bug, ya know?

Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that.
Hate cannot drive out hate ... only love can do that.
MLK

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33 posted 2003-05-24 06:22 PM


Wow JM... the imagery in this is fantabulous.

enjoyed it very much and how about another one!

Maree

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34 posted 2003-05-28 04:17 PM


Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.


Oh heavy sigh......................


From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone.


Okay I will fill up a page if I do what you do.

GURL - You are SO good, and worth waiting for when you do actually post.  I am framing this one, and hopefully one day you can see my wall like others have and know I love your work SO much.

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35 posted 2003-05-28 04:31 PM


I could get lost in the timeless beauty of your words, POETESS JM! I was swept away with emotion and was awed by your divinely descriptive writing. You have a tremendous amount of talent.

Lovin' hugs,
EA

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36 posted 2003-05-28 08:07 PM


This was wrote back in Open 16 and many of my poems from the time I came here, are about him, and many include the butterfly theme and metaphor. It was the symbol he gave me to help me accept that he would soon be taking flight from this world and so after he passed away, the butterfly became the heart of my poetry.
He was an extraordinary man and an exceptional poet in his own right and it was because of him that I picked up my pen after almost 20 years of not writing.
I honestly cant take the credit for the poems he inspired in me...often it was like he was writing through me.



Janet Marie, I have already commented on your poem, but now I want to let you know how much this part of your reply to Brian touched my heart. Thank you for being you, sweet Lady. Even though your poem is already very beautiful and special, this statement that you made makes it even more so. I hope you don't mind that I keep it?

Heart hugs to you from me  
Ethel

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37 posted 2003-05-28 09:45 PM


my goodness  ...a most humbled moth is present....

OK....first of all, to Dixie and Maree,
forgive me for not thanking you back when you both posted...Thank you both for stopping in and for your kindness.

My time here of late has been very limited and I'm having trouble keeping up with both my reading and replies. I apologize to all for missing your wonderful poetry. I hope things will settle down in the next few weeks.

Sharon, thank you very much for such a sweet reply and for your always faithful support of my work, To be on your " poetry wall" is an honor as I am sure I am in fine company. Thank you girlie and...its good to see your name in the forums again.

Linda...you humble me and make me mothy heart smile, thank you so much for such kind and gracious generosity to my work.

Ethel ... what a very sweet thing to say..you are quite the dear one yourself...
thank you so much for taking the time to come back to this and share your kind thoughts and spirit with me. Big mothy hugs back to you.

Darkness cannot drive out darkness ... only light can do that.
Hate cannot drive out hate ... only love can do that.
MLK

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38 posted 2003-05-28 09:57 PM


~Butterflies Are Meant To Be Free~


How do I tell you what your love has come to mean to me ...
How do I let go of you when it's time ... the way you need to be.
How do I make you realize the beauty in you that my heart sees,
How do I truly return your love ... if only by now accepting ...
Butterflies are meant to be free.

I cannot deny ... my heart is breaking,
I cannot say ... that I'm not shaken.
I will not promise ... that I wont cry ...
but I do love you enough to open my heart and let you fly ...

With in these moments shared ...
you've given me trust and love unconditionally,
I have grown so much in the light of your love ...
I have finally now ... found me.
Your love and all your heart's gifts ...
have made me stronger, helping me to believe.

I truly do now understand and accept ...
just like you ... butterflies are meant to be free.


Janet Marie
for DeVante' with love, always
10/99


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39 posted 2003-05-28 11:18 PM


http://www.animal-posters.com/c879_2.htm  
for you with love  

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40 posted 2003-05-28 11:32 PM


Thank you sweet Sharon.










Butterflies are meant to be free

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41 posted 2003-05-29 04:34 AM


I doon't know who requested that you repost this my dear poet pet but I'm sure glad you did because it's become a classic.

This is poetic refined gracefulness at it's finest. There is such tasteful richness in the elegant metaphors in this piece.

You da baby!

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42 posted 2003-05-29 08:19 PM


Wow...I have watched you grow as a poet in your time here, this write is a vivid display of your ever increasing skills. Nice, very nice < img src="http://kit.netpoets.net/kit-hootowl.gif">


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43 posted 2003-05-29 11:21 PM


Eric .. right back at ya groovy guy..   thank you for all that you are to me.
I sure do enjoy seeing your name around here again.

Ruth ... that is a wonderful compliment and I thank you for the generosity and kind words to my work. I have to laugh when I read my early posts, and I am so grateful for all that I have learned here by reading so many amazing writers. While reading and relying we are also learning from each other, as well as being inspired by so many in this special place. Thank you Hoot-girlie and how cool....I see Kit made your owl icon for you.
thank you to everyone on this thread for all your wonderful replies.

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44 posted 2003-05-30 04:40 AM



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45 posted 2003-05-31 12:36 PM


funny...I don't remember this one either...but ohhh, you know I love it!! I'm so glad I got to read it tonight....always Janet, your talent overflows....
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46 posted 2003-05-31 01:31 AM


This one is beyond special, it rises to heights I can only dream of. Fabulous!

And now she's in me, always with me, tiny dancer in my hand ~ Bernie Taupin

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47 posted 2003-05-31 09:36 PM


Dixie.. they are think Im paying you. thank you our resident queen of bump.

Susan, this was first posted as a "tribute" duet with Brian Madden called Soulmate Solstice..thats why you may not recall it...I reworked it and retitled it.
So glad you got to see it. great to have you back.

Eddie ... hey you...great to find you in the blue too...miss you around here...
hope all is well with you and the family.

thank you to all for your support of my writing.

thank you always to my butterfly Vante' for the inspiration.


Im still imagining your voice ...
can see the sparkle in your eyes.
I cant explain your power over me
Its understated understood & beautiful.
cj

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48 posted 2003-06-01 09:08 PM



"You whispered across my chasm of loneliness ...
reaching out for my hand, offering me a path paved
in the cadenced content of your company.
Across distance and darkness our fingers laced,
an entwining embrace lingering on in memory's trace
far beyond the fathoms of both time and space.
Palm pressed to palm ... caresses of calm ...
your touch melted away my incessant winters,
frigid nights warmed by the afterglow of our sighs.

From the first breath of your promised presence that
exhaled across the threshold of my unending need,
you became my oxygen. Consensually overcome ...
I inhaled you in and then ... came completely undone."
__________________

Hey there, JM...It's always a treat when you grace the
pages blue with your poetry, and this is no exception.
There's just something about your writing that draws
me in and holds me there, and blocks out all else.
You, my friend, are a true poet.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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49 posted 2003-06-01 09:17 PM


PS...see, you do have a chasm!!
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50 posted 2003-06-01 11:44 PM


Janet Marie - geez, this has to be one of the best writings I've ever read. For one to be inspired to write words such as these is.... There are no words to describe my thoughts right now after reading this...

BC

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51 posted 2003-06-02 05:37 AM


I knew it! I just knew this piece would leave me in awe of the passion that you pour into your poetry. I really enjoy a poem that I "feel" as I read. So much of your heart is projected into your words, and that's what makes your poetry so beautiful
Love n' hugs
Liz

Janet Marie
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52 posted 2003-06-02 08:01 AM


Vicky. ... hey girlie-girl..so good to see you back in the blue...thank you very much, thats a lovely and sweet thing to say. Thank you always for your support of my work.
I've got out of town company here and havent been in the forums much...I will have to see if youve been posting again..I hope so. TY Vicky.

Martie .. LOL... youre so cute... well now that you mention it..I guess I do...
and I even have a threshold...but I SWEAR I STILL havent found my vestibule
hahaha ... thanks sweetie.

Bill ... goodness , thank you very very much for your lovely reaction to this, thats a very kind and generous compliment and I am both humbled and appreciative.
As I said earlier on this thread, this was written for someone very special,  he was an extraordinary man and an exceptional poet in his own right and it was because of him that I picked up my pen after almost 20 years of not writing.
I honestly cant take the credit for the poems he inspired in me...often it was like he was writing through me. But yes...feeling the inspiration from that depth is a very special gift and one that I will always treasure. Thank you again poet sir

Lizzie... Hi there dear poetess....its SO good to see your name here in the blue again...we miss you so much..thank you Liz, for such a lovely response...I feel the same way when I read in here... like when I read your beautiful poetry.
Thank you !!







thank you to ALL who have made this post so special.

Im still imagining your voice ...
can see the sparkle in your eyes.
I cant explain your power over me
Its understated understood & beautiful.
cj

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