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Open Poetry #26

Angry Sad Poem

j0n4th4n
Member

since 2003-03-11

Posts 94

0 posted 2003-05-19 11:16 AM

I don't know why
she won't tell anyone
he
keeps trying

it
on

if they knew
he'd be in
deep
shtick

so now I
think
she enjoys it

moustachioed
creep

keep your hands
off

...but only if
she doesn't
want you

if she does,
I don't care.
I don't care what

anyone does.

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

1 posted 2003-05-19 11:19 AM

So I take it either they're doing it or he's molesting her. And did you like her or are friends with her or something. It's a bit confusing but I think I get it.

I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so.

j-oh-E
Member

since 2003-05-01

Posts 59
Texas, USA

2 posted 2003-05-19 12:22 PM

I start thinking about the way the media blows an event out of proportion and then forgets about it when something "juicier" comes about. In your poem, I am reminded of the indifference people feel when the media-hype is over with. In your poem, you pointed out the fact that it's easy to ignore the horrible things happening around you because these things aren't actually happening to you. That's why you dismiss your anger at the end. I like this. You deserve a good critique. Thanks for writing.
-Joey

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