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Patricia
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0 posted 2003-05-17 03:04 PM


Self Censored

Do you recall when I tried to discuss
My emotional loss regarding us?
Of course, I do, in fact quite well-
Your policy of don’t ask, don’t tell.

Therefore, concerning me, your reply?
Your feelings, love, are a bold-faced lie.
With a last effort to save us from the fall,
I determined that I should overlook it all.

Monitoring so closely the emotions I had,
Numbness prevailed, neither good, nor bad.
As, I, self-censored, the peace was kept-
While deep in me, all my emotions slept.

Until came that inevitable August day,
I saw the beast in you, and it I slay.
Dormant feelings could no longer lay
As the emotional checks slipped away.

So now you tell where my feelings should go?
I have since forgotten and need to know.
What do I do with this emotional overflow?
After a winter’s melting of ice and snow.


[This message has been edited by Patricia (05-17-2003 03:43 PM).]

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regards2you
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1 posted 2003-05-17 03:28 PM




Pat,

Wonderful in describing the demise of a love gone wrong. The waiting, the hoping and the inevitable when we can no longer deny our emotions and our humanness.

Loved the ending here...and ya know, between me, for a different reason, and you, we aren't gonna have to worry about a drought any time soon.

May you continue toward peace of mind and renewal. Poems such as this a tender reminder of where some were and where we are now.

God keep you in your quest of you....

Hugs and love, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

QjQ
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2 posted 2003-05-17 03:48 PM


What do I do with this emotional overflow?
After a winter’s melting of ice and snow.


very touching ending!!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-05-17 04:39 PM


Be who you are if you like who you are...if you try to live your life to please another the real you will die...james
MikeFessel
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4 posted 2003-05-19 08:01 AM


Patricia,
You are pumping out great poems here at a steady rate! Ahh, how the depth of your poems continues to grow. I really feel your emotions beginning to express themselves more and more fully in your poetry. Keep it up, but be careful, lest they flood the page as they often do with my poetry

"What do I do with this emotional overflow?
After a winter’s melting of ice and snow."

Oh I loved this poem, but the ending especially!

     Yay! Keep it up!
        Mike

      

Nan
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5 posted 2003-05-19 09:02 AM


Let yourself be... Uncensored?...
garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-05-19 12:30 PM


Patricia, just be yourself, because you seem to
be a very good person. I know how it feels when you
try to be what someone else wants you to be.
It makes start wondering what happened to the real you.
One of the many things I love so much about my Honey-Love
is that he wants me to be ME and still loves me.

"To be in love with love is truly to love".....by Paladin
~with heart hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

Ericc
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7 posted 2003-05-19 02:54 PM


Awesome expression of the heart.
You know what to do.
It all begins(and ends) in love.
Start with yourself.
Love yourself open and full.
Love the little things about yourself,love the great things. Love the things you hate.
Breathe love to the depths of your heart...and then breathe your heart to all.

Its a place to start.
Love,
Eric

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8 posted 2003-05-19 07:19 PM


Patricia~
This is a lovely emote from the heart~

And Other Pat's answer is a beaut !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Magnus
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9 posted 2003-05-19 09:41 PM


Oh, this is good...and I think someone is
fixin' to get their tail ripped.....


Richy
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10 posted 2003-05-20 01:48 AM



For Patricia,


Like snow packs of silence one could not suppress
Buried in glaciers of frozen duress
Suddenly melted by guile so raw
Loathing so scornful, creating a thaw

Coldness held dormant now free to unleash
Torrents of fury held back from release
Rivers of yearning now flood over banks
Bringing relief to a heartland of angst

Free to now roam and begin life anew
Uncharted waters so vibrant and blue
Looking for streambeds now peaceful and slow
Where all her love can now, once again flow


Hang in there my friend!

Great Poem!


Richy


[This message has been edited by Richy (05-20-2003 01:49 AM).]

passing shadows
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11 posted 2003-05-20 03:08 AM


Patricia, I know how it feels...wonderful rhyming here, a well-written piece concerning the heart, and characteristics of relationships that we seem to share.
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