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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-05-17 02:48 AM



you walk on the ground

   sometimes you fall down a mineshaft

you walk on the ground
and
   sometimes you climb a mountain

Sometimes

   you climb a mountain
       and lose your balance
   and go tumbling down a mineshaft

and
Other times

   you fall down a mineshaft
       and are borne up by a draft
   and your toes touch down on a mountain top

and then?
there are Those times

rare
       times

when Mt Everest
and the
Marianas trench

are but heartbeats apart

and you wonder

about terminal velocity
and
rocketships...
.
.
.
you walk on the ground



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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-05-17 03:05 AM


nice write !!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Shimlu
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2 posted 2003-05-17 03:31 AM


Very nice write, enjoyed it greatly, hope to see more from you.


littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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3 posted 2003-05-17 04:03 AM


bri

you never cease to amaze me
and quite frankly I am sick of
tumbling (bruised up - you know?)
and await the day I walk . . .

on the ground that is
(been flying around - I'm gettin dizzy)

This is brilliant
(yes . . . I said brilliant)
hehehe
xxoo

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-05-17 04:09 AM


and sometimes?

you just fall into yourself...


There ARE no icons for this.

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-05-17 05:54 AM


very cool write...awesome as always
Aenimal
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6 posted 2003-05-17 12:29 PM


You forgot about the banana peels..
Loved this bri how true how true

wranx
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7 posted 2003-05-17 12:39 PM


Nice piece of writin' here dude.

You've found your sweet spot.

But I just KNOW that there was a "tune" rollin' 'round in there somewhere, just don't know which one...hehe

Midnitesun
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8 posted 2003-05-17 12:42 PM


loved the way you had me climbing and falling at the same time

brian sites
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9 posted 2003-05-18 12:48 PM


thank you good people

and lessee
falling into yourself......
icon icon

nothing as deep as a bowed head
smile

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