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0 posted 2003-05-16 12:40 PM



Eclipse

it’s only an
eclipse a
quirk
of timing
nothing to
disturb or
give
significance
these two
the sun and
moon
would shine
together
blending
perfectly
their light one
light
purpose one
purpose
as it was
intended
but this random
flaw
this singlarity
of circumstance
keeps them apart
separates
for just a moment
all their timing
perfect
till the world
got in the way

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-16 12:46 PM


nice ed...funny how we all stand under the same sky...h
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2 posted 2003-05-16 12:48 PM


Till the world got in the way! A good one...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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3 posted 2003-05-16 12:51 PM


Ed...As with most of your poetry, this can be read from a deeper level, past just the moon, into the human.  Goodnight.
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4 posted 2003-05-16 01:17 AM


outstanding
keeping this one, it has many thoughts blended into

one(ness)

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5 posted 2003-05-16 04:28 AM



Yes, til the world got in the way...

Love that thought...


Enjoyed, Hugs Pat


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6 posted 2003-05-16 04:31 AM


nice write

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7 posted 2003-05-16 04:43 AM


it seems to be all a question of timing and where you are at a given (or an ungiven) point in time...

enjoyed your words...

regards
sudhir

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8 posted 2003-05-16 04:53 AM


Rat

I like the aspect of the combination
of the two
seems as though the world
gets in the way of everything

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (05-16-2003 04:59 AM).]

littlewing
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9 posted 2003-05-16 05:00 AM


Ed:

you have no idea how much this means to me truly
I am sending this in a card to someone . . .
truly bittersweet
xxoo  

[This message has been edited by littlewing (05-16-2003 05:02 AM).]

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10 posted 2003-05-16 05:02 AM


damn! this is awesome!
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11 posted 2003-05-16 08:31 AM


Very nice, Ed - I enjoyed this metaphor muchly...
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12 posted 2003-05-16 09:30 AM


nice
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13 posted 2003-05-16 10:10 AM


Exactly!
So much to fill these lines...excellent write. TD

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14 posted 2003-05-16 10:32 AM


*smiles*

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15 posted 2003-05-16 10:45 AM


very nice, Ed. I wonder if anyone got to see it. We had rain all night.

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16 posted 2003-05-16 04:45 PM


Great ending. It infuses the poem with extra meanings, and depth.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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17 posted 2003-05-16 04:54 PM


but this random
flaw
this singlarity
of circumstance
keeps them apart
separates
for just a moment
all their timing
perfect
till the world
got in the way

My thoughts wandered onto many paths as I sat outside last night and watched... wondering who else might be watching. *S* But my primary thought as I read this is that your words are as beautiful as the event. *S*

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18 posted 2003-05-16 04:57 PM


Exactly!!!  Love this and I'm keeping it!!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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