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icebox
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since 2003-05-03
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in the shadows

0 posted 2003-05-13 08:35 PM


Why did you call today
from the wasteland of so many years;
so many tears, so many bitter years
of all the laughter never shared,
were you standing on the refuse
of the dreams we once compared
then one day abandoned like a garden left forgotten
to die slowly as its harvest shriveled on the ground?

Why did you drag your young voice out ?
It was the young girl's voice
with which you used to tease me
in urgent pleas for indulgences of hedonistic excess
guaranteed to please you,
to make me want to meet your every need;
it was a great plane ride until the crash;
you walked away so clean and left me tangled in the wreck.

Did you call today simply to see
if the familiar lilting dancing patter,
like machine gun chatter,
that still and always is the same remembered voice kept locked down in some deep freeze
in the basement of my soul,
could still run loose and free
cutting deeply through my life?
How dare you act
like you can seize my heart and mind again
like you could blow the clouds of years away?
You would need a time machine that ran on tears.

The choice you made all those years ago
meant an end to what was us.
I moved on, rebuilt my life the best I knew;
with time I dropped my anger,
cropped my mental photographs of younger days,
(are your eyes still pale pale blue, or were they only shades of gray?)
until one day in passing I remembered
I could forget to not remember you.

Now your disembodied voice shows up today,
on my telephone which took years before
it had become safe again for me to use,
with mindless questions of no value,
in a conversation taken from the middle of a story I don't know
without beginning, with no reference,
like we'd last spoken yesterday instead of years ago.
You said you were walking on the beach
and didn't know which way to go,
barefoot wearing just a dress, the dress we threw on leaves
the last time you were in reach, now walking on a beach in Brooklyn
even though the sand is full of broken glass and spikes
and could not even look clean in the snow.
Your eyes surely safe from the likes of screaming fans,
behind big sun glasses, a scarf hiding your hair;
we'd both agree you can't afford to be that free.
You asked if you should eat a hotdog
at Nathan's Coney Island, with beer,
in the rain, and how late did I think
you could get safely back again
to where ever you call home today;
I really wondered with a moment's hesitation
if it was you or I who'd gone insane.

©2003 by icebox

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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
1 posted 2003-05-14 12:33 PM


Perhaps we should never forget to remember the good times but that being said, you take the reader well through your thoughts.  Thank you.
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
2 posted 2003-05-14 01:01 AM


Did you call today simply to see
if the familiar lilting dancing patter,
like machine gun chatter,
that still and always is the same remembered voice kept locked down in some deep freeze

Well Dayummmm!!  Choices, choices, and so bittersweet~

Felt the deep chill~ hugs ya, icebox~

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2003-05-14 08:26 AM


tch....oh sweetheart.

this started out as a plea, and then the rage and pain, and sorrow--even tho I expected THAT? I was still startled by the intensity.

Hugs to you. This came from the deep m'friend.

icebox
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since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383
in the shadows
4 posted 2003-05-14 11:19 PM


Honeybunch ~ memory in general serves me too well; sometimes I think there are memories which are best left sleeping with the dead.  Thank you for reading this and for your comment.

BluesSerenade ~ You should be careful of the cold.  I was taught, as a young man, that women should always be kept warm. *smile*    Thank you for reading and for your comment.

serenity blaze ~ you are correct; this anger is only just barely contained.  I wrote this in part because I was surprised myself at how close to the surface these old feelings really were and how deep they went.  Thank you for reading and for your comment.

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