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Aenimal
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0 posted 2003-05-12 02:35 PM


I walk with the dead
empty shells of what we were
ghosts, we haunt ourselves

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (05-12-2003 02:35 PM).]

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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
1 posted 2003-05-12 02:54 PM


That was incredibly chilling to the bone!
I'd say it's time to get some friends that  still belong to the land of the living!

Sending you lots of healing Light,
EA

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (05-12-2003 03:36 PM).]

Justbleu
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2 posted 2003-05-12 03:17 PM


A haiku that I can truly relate to....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


regards2you
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3 posted 2003-05-12 07:48 PM



Oh my, I like it. Hope that was a then, here a now for ya....

Walk with the loving
Look into my mirrored eyes
See strength and wisdom


Hugs you, Pat/Trish  


littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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New York
4 posted 2003-05-12 07:56 PM


Good Lord - we do - dont we?
*sitting here in a haze
feeling . . . lost*

awesome wrting yet again
as always
amazing
xxoo

Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2003-05-12 08:36 PM


happy haunting, Raph
apparitions tell stories,
recite poetry


guess who made me do it

Magnus
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6 posted 2003-05-12 08:53 PM


Be careful Raph,   your senryu is getting
almost as good as some of my chillig poetry.
Maybe better?

Honeybee
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7 posted 2003-05-12 09:14 PM


Damn yet again! Raph, you are way too good at expressing yourself.  Never stop writing and this is a hauntingly beautiful senryu.  I'm saving it~

Melissa

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

kaile
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8 posted 2003-05-13 03:04 AM


this reads so poignant and sad...made me wonder if i am like that actually, just living a lie?
garysgirl
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9 posted 2003-05-13 03:18 AM


OOOOHHHH, that's scary, Raph.  

passing shadows
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displaced
10 posted 2003-05-13 03:57 AM


true, so true...God, you have a way with words that I really appreciate
Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-05-13 02:18 PM


Linda living isn't simply breathing and there's alot of people out there walking dead

Thanks justbleu senryu though, haiku's deal with nature someone taught me this but i forget now

Pat i like yours better hopefully one day

Sue hugs i know you know

Kacy always make me smile thanks

Magnus thanks for the compliment your poetry is in a league of its own

Thanks Melissa see how can i stop writing when i have a manger who pushes like you..grin

Kaile am i alive or am i a lie, i wrote that in one of my archived poems methinks..

Ethel you talking about my face? yeah you're right..oh the poem..oops

Dixie thanks for always reading and bumping those words for me


dreambuilder
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caddyshack
12 posted 2003-05-13 05:20 PM


I can relate to this
I have a past that haunts me daily
& a future that screams for me to wake up

& often, I too feel surrounded
by people who have given up on life & are just waiting to be buried

excellent write my friend

. . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream  . . .

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-05-13 07:56 PM


So true your words Raph.

enjoyed.

Maree

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