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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-05-12 02:42 AM



strong enough
  to make diamond

bleed lime into
cavern
       us

drip
     tell
drip

           me
drip

        that
drip
            it

drip
        is
drip
            okay

I would grow
through
the sound
of your
years

meet me you
in the
dark inbetween

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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-05-12 03:46 AM


sigh~ how beautiful...loved the presentation
Sunshine
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2 posted 2003-05-12 06:25 AM


I have been in those caves...
where mystery was born.

Excellent presentation!

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3 posted 2003-05-12 06:40 AM


Well done -- classic ekphrasis (for which I am a fool!) and a message that goes right to the center of me as well.

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Sudhir Iyer
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4 posted 2003-05-12 07:24 AM


very nice...

regards
sudhir

brian sites
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5 posted 2003-05-12 09:40 AM


wow

thank you people!

ekphrasis?
scratching head..
that has a name?
smile

Martie
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6 posted 2003-05-12 09:43 AM


Brian

"I would grow
through
the sound
of your
years"

Beautiful!!!

serenity blaze
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7 posted 2003-05-12 09:59 AM


It is more than "okay"

you...amaze

beautiful words--beautiful poet

(crazy viking)

I'll see you in the dark inbetween...

(serenity looks both ways)

sneak attack

wranx
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8 posted 2003-05-12 11:13 AM


bonk

               I
    bang
          keep


bonk
         bumping


bounce

      into

  ouch
         those

bonk
      things
crash

Janette
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9 posted 2003-05-12 01:58 PM


Such an interesting write here.

It made me think of the wait before dark which can be a torturous time indeed.

Enjoyed!

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
10 posted 2003-05-12 02:19 PM


Smiling at Bri's andiwork and laughing at Ed's
littlewing
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11 posted 2003-05-13 12:30 PM


bri - this is amazing  - awesome write
(I can hear those drips) and it is lovely and Ed lol - you two guys . . .  no fair having so much fun

I loved this
xxoo  

[This message has been edited by littlewing (05-14-2003 01:39 AM).]

Justbleu
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12 posted 2003-05-13 12:50 PM


Very interesting!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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13 posted 2003-05-13 02:22 AM


I love it! ah, remembering Moaning Cave


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