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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-05-11 10:03 PM

The night is spent

And the day…

Finds us huddled naked
In the nest of our vestments

My mail shirt
Formed from the many links
of countless disappointments
And
Her heavy cloak
Brocaded with the dark designs
of secrets, as yet unspoken

Had made our bed

As she awoke
she sewed her songs of promise
into the mists

When she stirred
she sowed sighs of her longing
into the Sedge

And I arose
To seek the suns solace
While stretching to meet it

Together, we broke our fast
on the spare bread of trust
and the clear water of truth

Before setting out, once again

To spend the day…

~*~ ~*~ ~*~
It would seem that this is a continuation of these;

"Black and white night" /pip/Forum79/HTML/001325.html

"The day is spent" /pip/Forum79/HTML/001504.html

Who knew?

[This message has been edited by wranx (05-11-2003 10:10 PM).]

QjQ
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since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
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1 posted 2003-05-11 10:07 PM

interesting write!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

2 posted 2003-05-11 10:10 PM

wow... i liked!

Love Always,

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

3 posted 2003-05-11 11:08 PM

Interesting the lines that ramble in the minds...Always well done. TD

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

4 posted 2003-05-11 11:18 PM

Very nice....
I enjoy your use of words!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Janette

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since 2001-07-20

Posts 2843
Chicagoland for now

5 posted 2003-05-12 12:28 PM

You have a most interesting way of communicating ... I find your work ... fascinating.

Interesting clothes, too ... your shirt of "links" ... now that one made me smile ... so original!

But these lines were by far THE best:

"on the spare bread of trust
and the clear water of truth"

I like your choice of breaking your fast.

Enjoyed!

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-05-12 03:07 AM

Ed:

a story unraveling here before my eyes
a most beautiful tale indeed

you made me smile
I much needed that
thank you
and this - a brilliant continuation . . .
xxoo

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

7 posted 2003-05-12 03:12 AM

this is
a
shower

clean

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

8 posted 2003-05-12 04:44 AM

not one word out of place... I wish I could write like this... really great...

regards
sudhir

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

9 posted 2003-05-12 11:15 AM

"Together, we broke our fast
on the spare bread of trust
and the clear water of truth"

smiles to y'yeti.

and bit of silent awe.

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

10 posted 2003-05-12 11:28 AM

wranx...picking same special lines as Serenity...well done!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

11 posted 2003-05-12 11:40 AM

You blow me away!---literally!

Huggums,
EA

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

12 posted 2003-05-12 01:53 PM

Who knew?
Those who feel
the talent come a'creeping in...
cat's paws wereneverthisilent....

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

13 posted 2003-05-16 11:28 PM

Ed!!
I haven't read anything of yours in a long time, now... it's good to, though.

I liked the stanza about clothing, as well. Good metaphors. At least I think that's a metaphor. Heh, my words have been quite scrambled lately. Anyhow, a very good write. And you used the word solace! ...that's one of my favorite words.

But yeah.. the topic seemed to be a little more..mature, than anything I'd know about

, but I enjoyed it, nonetheless.

Well, it's good to read you again. Take care.

~Sara

"You've Made A Mess Of Yourself, You've Made A Mess Of Everything You're A Mess..."
-orgy--dizzy-

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2003-05-16 11:58 PM

The entire series is an elegant brocade and full of deep meaning, it's your trademark, and you wear it well. I'm sorry to be late with my reply~
Each thought is a fine line and intricately laced.

This is so rich, wranx!!

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