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Open Poetry #26

Empty Toll

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-05-09 12:08 PM

Empty Toll

the heart is
a lonely bell
that rings
in empty toll
hollow notes echo
in such silence
thundering metal
upon metal
of deliberate swinging
of side to side
hammer hitting
space hard
till surface
is thin
just clamoring
to be heard

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-05-09 12:46 PM

I love this:

"hammer hitting space hard"

Who knew that nothing could hurt so bad.

*heart-hugs* my friend...

and yes, this cup SHALL pass.

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

2 posted 2003-05-09 12:48 PM

"just clamoring
to be heard"

I can hardly wait to get to your last lines.
Always something to look forward to.
You've done it again!

SAG

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-05-09 01:40 PM

I love how you say things H

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

4 posted 2003-05-09 07:09 PM

Love that image, the clapper pounding a thin spot on the bell -- so clear a picture of the feeling....

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