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Soleil Noir
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0 posted 2003-05-08 02:26 PM





The surgeon knows
where the heart lies
in lay of quiet,
pounding
in the grasp of thump

but he cannot cut
out the ache of pain,
transparent but mightily
sincere in sensation

he cannot diminish
the desire, nor calm
the qualm…

she looks into his eyes
as he says there is no draught
for the drought,

no Rx to rid her
mental state of the flurry
that hurries her
thoughts along, for her
heart is found empty
of her own
song

He knows the maladies
of milady,
extending to her the briefest
break of the tragic knowledge
she was yet again
in the wrong time
wrong place
wrong
space

Will it matter, he
asks, if her heart might not
ever repair, she can
certainly live on

for her body will still function
though no compunction
for her lips to smile,

sustenance will feed her,
only her soul may starve,
limbs will move along, though
no one need know the strings
of the master

He pats her hand,
indicating there is nothing more
he can do

he is only a surgeon,
and he has no potion
for this ache
of love

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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2003-05-08 02:30 PM


nice
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2003-05-08 03:20 PM


Fantastic...what is living without the joy of the heart...james
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3 posted 2003-05-08 06:15 PM


'Will it matter, he
asks, if her heart might not
ever repair, she can
certainly live on

for her body will still function
though no compunction
for her lips to smile,

sustenance will feed her,
only her soul may starve,
limbs will move along, though
no one need know the strings
of the master'

I tried to write something along these lines once and didn't even come close to what you've done here.  I really like this Soleil, very much!

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4 posted 2003-05-08 06:57 PM


nice
Magnus
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5 posted 2003-05-08 08:46 PM


Very nicely done Soleil....could not have
done it better myself..

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-05-09 04:46 AM


wonderful piece, and so sadly honest
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7 posted 2003-05-10 05:06 PM




(sigh) Oh Soleil, this is so very powerfully heartaching, sweet friend, leave the remedy to the witch doctors, seems they'd have more of a clue than surgeons! (big hugggssssssss) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Soleil, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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8 posted 2003-05-10 05:07 PM


enjoyed
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9 posted 2003-05-11 09:44 PM


K~
This one is just too, too sad~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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10 posted 2003-05-11 09:54 PM


Will it matter, he
asks, if her heart might not
ever repair, she can
certainly live on

for her body will still function
though no compunction
for her lips to smile,

sustenance will feed her,
only her soul may starve,
limbs will move along, though
no one need know the strings
of the master

He pats her hand,
indicating there is nothing more
he can do

he is only a surgeon,
and he has no potion
for this ache
of love


Soleil, this one really touched me. I could feel
the pain as I was reading, it seemed. Goodness,
this is good writing.
Hugs,
Ethel

Martie
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11 posted 2003-05-11 10:47 PM


Where is Doctor Love?  
passing shadows
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12 posted 2003-05-12 04:14 AM


glad this one came back up
Nan
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13 posted 2003-05-12 10:48 AM


If only we had doctors to heal our hearts... What a great thing that would be...
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