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Elusive Prince
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Elusive Prince |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Elusive Prince I shall forget now how once you laid your head against my weary breast crashing your waves into my ocean flat belly rolled of Neptune's skin, leaving me with hope, mechanism to cope in make-believe and fairytales. My little girl world is shattering like panes of broken glass, each shard thrusts deeper, jagged tears leaving me with only an ache for my heart. But, I must remember that the doorway to heaven is also the gate to hell. By Melissa Long-Monette |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh my...this one is sort of scary...like facing reality. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
This is sort of hard to picture in your particular case.....but beautifully conceived and written. Glad I stopped by. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Honeybee, Just plain perfect! Love the ending. Hugs, Pat  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
ah yes. . .but, which Hell my friend??? and, I've found that tears heal. . . time. . . well done. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Gateway to hell? You mean Buffalo? Oh Sue's going to kill me for that. Awesome writing as usual oh manager. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Depending on if you're looking up laying down or standing still, up does not always lead back down! (sigh) This is powerfully heartaching, sweet friend, I hope all is well with you, I send healing hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Gosh, could feel those shards.... Such beauty in the words written of a tragedy. Perhaps the Prince will not remain so elusive?? I surely hope so... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Melissa!!! This is fantastic and what an ending!!! I love this...and I'm keeping it! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
"But, I must remember that the doorway to heaven is also the gate to hell." oh myyyyyyyyy...helen |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Melissa: ohh - yes - that doorway surely is a gateway to both - nicely penned actually quite brilliant . . . Raph - do NOT think for one minute you are getting away with that up there MR mmmwwaaaaahhahahahahah . . . (oh you wait) (besides shhh . . . . I live in ElectricLadyLand) amazing write xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (05-08-2003 11:23 PM).] |
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