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ptwils165
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since 2002-11-29
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0 posted 2003-05-07 07:53 PM



please sir
theres a poem
i can't write.

the girl
its about-
well, I love her.

she doesn't know.
and i don't know
if that's important.

it doesn't say
what to do
in the textbook.

and every time
i try to write something
it looks wrong.

it doesn't look
like her sir.
and i don't know why.

please sir
tell me
how to write about rebecca.

Re-bec-ca.

i'm sorry sir
i thought i needed help.
but i didn't.

i've done it.
this is easy sir
isn't it?

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regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
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1 posted 2003-05-07 07:58 PM





Pete,

Love the sense of humor and humility in this...


Hugs, Pat  




..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (05-08-2003 03:52 PM).]

rosepetals25
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2 posted 2003-05-07 08:11 PM


I love this It's so sweet and cute! Awwww is about the only thing I can say

Tara

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