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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2003-05-07 08:04 AM


the music lingers on
long after the tape is played
                far too long after
like engraved images of
meteorite showers
behind the distant horizon
on a clear night

stamped into memory

while new tunes come by
they sing and then they die
like brand new relationships:
                fresh
                        flesh
like small-time hobbies
to be noted in a stranger’s journals
                collecting goldfish (for instance)

like dreams that can’t be remembered

and by the way
like lines of a favourite song
first love’s never forgotten
puppy love and teenage afflictions
                irreplaceably innocent

like childhood laughs
filling the room and staying there
in the heart of the mother
long after child becomes man
                far too long after

a legacy that lives on
far after the land bears a different name
in dusty chambers of the heart
                history books of feel
coloured by crayons of thought
and words from the soul

of having been of meaning to someone

and even if that meaning is lost
the having been never loses its shine
and the moments of meaning are never wiped
unlike chalk from a blackboard
long after age breaks down time
                far too long after

far too long

                 that then could be
                 the greatest gift of all
                 like timeless parachutes
                 dyed in yellow and blue
                 flying across land and sea
                 in an infinite green dream

far too long

© Copyright 2003 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
Justbleu
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1 posted 2003-05-07 10:14 AM


Yes!!!!
Very nicely done!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-05-07 10:30 AM


Sudhir, this is a very fine piece of writing and I enjoyed reading it emensely.---I didn't want it to end!

Luvin' hugs,
Linda

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3 posted 2003-05-07 10:33 AM


like engraved images of
meteorite showers
behind the distant horizon
on a clear night

stamped into memory


nice imagery and love the line break... well done my friend.. well done indeed. I would say there are a number of young ladies who would swoon at reading your words and delving into the thoughts behind them.

Bill Charles
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4 posted 2003-05-07 10:58 AM


Sudhir - your words are always one to read with much meaning...

BC

littlewing
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5 posted 2003-05-07 11:39 AM


Sudhir:

and even if that meaning is lost
the having been never loses its shine
and the moments of meaning are never wiped

never ever
amazing xxoo

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6 posted 2003-05-07 11:27 PM




(sigh) Oh Sudhir, this is wonderful, sweet friend, such moments will never cease to exist because the wind always runs its course and the parachutes will flitter on! (big hugggsssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

wranx
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7 posted 2003-05-07 11:32 PM


I concur, that this is a fine piece of writing. You have, it seems, found your voice.
Your writing is now a signature.

Suetang
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8 posted 2003-05-07 11:40 PM


Hello Sudhir

There were so many amazing images within your words which were so cleverly written.

Take care.....Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

Sudhir Iyer
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9 posted 2003-05-08 04:26 AM


thanking you all so very much...

regards,
sudhir

regards2you
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10 posted 2003-05-08 11:52 AM



Sudhir,

No idea how I missed this one.

One of my favorites on line right now.
Oh my goodness...it is great...

Like Linda was sorry it ended..

Love your work!

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
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11 posted 2003-05-08 12:15 PM


yes, my friend. . . the music never ends. . . only the tunes change. . .

and yes, it's been far too long since I've last read you my friend. . .I shall try to not have it be so long next time. . .

great work. . .

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12 posted 2003-05-08 07:08 PM


enjoyed
passing shadows
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13 posted 2003-05-09 05:37 AM


in silent awe here...
Sudhir Iyer
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14 posted 2003-05-12 04:20 AM


Thanks a lot, Pat, Sven, Vandana and Dixie... It feels great to read your words...

regards,
sudhir

El_Campeador
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15 posted 2003-05-12 10:48 AM


"far too long

                 that then could be
                 the greatest gift of all
                 like timeless parachutes
                 dyed in yellow and blue
                 flying across land and sea
                 in an infinite green dream"

Ah, yes... Sometimes the "far too long" is simply grace given to us to remember how far we have come--The greatest gift of all.

Sudhir, this is excellent! I really enjoy reading your poetry.

Blessings,

El Campeador

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

Sudhir Iyer
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16 posted 2003-05-13 04:03 AM


El Campeador, Thank you very much...

regards,
sudhir

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