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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack 
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The newest plane expensive advanced built from the ground up Bugs worked out test flights done extensive preperation Everything... constantly redone shifted till... Perfection Today All the dreams chased everything I've done for this moment Thrust back I smile... take off Dreams coming true Suddenly Disaster Too late to stop Too early to bail . . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Quite a dark ending but a real fine open message and it can go anywhere in the reader's mind. Nice work! |
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Sonic Junior Member
since 2003-05-06
Posts 13Victoria, Australia |
All the dreams chased everything I've done for this moment Suddenly Disaster Too late to stop Too early to bail And so my marriage ended. Written for many situations, relevant for mine. Thank you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
dream - you know lately I think you have been reading my mind Get out of my head already lol I can relate to this more than you know ahh but you do know- dont you? Your flight will once reach the clouds soon my friend your writing is superb and touches me deeply thank you xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It's a catch 22 all right~ I hope you find that runway and land safely. *enjoyed* |
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j-oh-E Member
since 2003-05-01
Posts 59Texas, USA |
What happens when you are about to crash and burn? I think everyone knows what you're talking about because nothing lasts. Great poem! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . just checking the flight . . . |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Sometimes out of disaster raises a Phoenix...Wonderful write... |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
ethome - thank you for the kind words sonic - I do write from my personal life - yet I try to make it relatable - thank you - OH & hey aussie huh - that is awesome littlewing - not reading your mind - well... ok maybe just a little - lol your words are so sweet Thank You Soooo Much - XXOO Blues - what can I say but ... Back to the drawing board - that plane is toast j-oh-e - Texas huh - Lived there many years - been all over the state - & the poem referred startime55 - wow - I just wrote a poem after this about that - a pheonix - Thank You so much - I needed to hear it though Thank You All For Reading & commenting - I appreciate you all sooo Much . . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
. . . this deserves to breathe a bit |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow, glad I didn't miss this one...an awesome piece! |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
I hate it when that happens... Wow, what a risk... I guess if there wasn’t much of a risk... it wouldn’t be much of a dream though? Real Nice Dreambuilder! Richy |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ah yes I've crashed a few, you write so well |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss( I'm still having trouble achieving liftoff, I am rusty on the knowledge the Wright Brothers had I suppose! (sigh) Fear not, soon all your dreams will take flight, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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