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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2003-05-05 10:33 PM



Electric whirlpools  
rushing in a constant stream
muscles tense and relax
easing down into the flow.  
  
Sensations pulse with warmth that steams
fluid moves and every simple touch of hand
stirs my breath unevenly
playing misty in my dreams.

Pouring out desires that spill below the surface
delighting in the flow of liquid swirls
soaking up the pleasure of each jet releasing
sluicing through the center of my being.

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icebox
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1 posted 2003-05-06 12:04 PM


The reading feels so good, how do you ever get out of the pool?  *smile*

Whirlpools are beyond my experience, but I think now I understand them better.  Thank you.

Larry C
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2 posted 2003-05-06 12:10 PM


Bluesie,
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playing misty in my dreams.
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Lucky guy!

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Richy
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3 posted 2003-05-06 02:26 AM




Oh My!

My glasses fogged over when I read this one...

And I don’t even wear glasses!


Phewww!


BluesSerenade, this poem is sensational


I’m saving this one for dang sure!



ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-05-06 02:51 AM


Big Grin...
This is so cool.  We must have been having similar thoughts this eve.  Wonderful expression in such a sensual write. TD

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-05-06 03:55 AM


wow! gorgeous write!
Cpat Hair
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6 posted 2003-05-06 07:48 AM


very nice... as usual.

got room in that tub for two?

Bill Charles
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7 posted 2003-05-06 09:48 AM


BluesSerenade - I like playing misty in dreams, nice...

BC

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8 posted 2003-05-06 09:51 AM


Sounds dangerous -- a person could melt altogether in a place like that!

And should!

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Jason Lyle
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With my darkling
9 posted 2003-05-06 09:53 AM


Reads like mercury, nice job!
Jason

nakdthoughts
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10 posted 2003-05-06 10:42 AM


another nice write.
You can make any poem sensuous, ya know?
hugs
M

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11 posted 2003-05-06 12:02 PM



Oh my, Missy!  Fogging up all the guy's computer screens!  Grins at Ed's reply and Maureen is right on.
You does these so well! Incredible talent...

enjoyed, hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Sunshine
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12 posted 2003-05-06 12:06 PM



So this is why it's so foggy!


Dark Angel
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13 posted 2003-05-06 05:14 PM


I want what you're having!!! hehe.

enjoyed very much blues.

Maree

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14 posted 2003-05-06 05:47 PM


oops!  i just slipped deeper into to bubbling froth!

Rf

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15 posted 2003-05-06 08:41 PM


May kind of poem that is for sure, and definitely my kind of scene.  Great poem and I waved this one for again, and again.
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16 posted 2003-05-06 08:52 PM




(smiles) Oh Lori, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love these wonderful feelings of being one in the whirlpool and finding myself sinking into my own Atlantis to see all the colors and swan songs never thought possible! (kiss on cheek) I love the spin in this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Dark Stranger
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17 posted 2003-05-06 08:56 PM


shure rite knice layyyydee (wink)

since you were close I had to tag ya

dug it bluzy....

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
18 posted 2003-05-06 11:33 PM


Thanks for jumping in everyone, it's been fun.  

I sure do appreciate you all!!

littlewing
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19 posted 2003-05-07 12:01 PM


*mouth shut*  hehehehe

this is amazing
xxoo

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
20 posted 2003-05-07 12:40 PM


There you go, it's the first thing I learned,  
gotta hold your breath when you start going under.  

You're so sweet tweets~ thanks~

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