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Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2003-05-05 09:23 PM

Early the orange-red rise exposes
mysteries obscure in a frigid scene.
Early, dawn will make love to the earth;
a mosaic in butter, crimson, and sultry aquamarine.

Glinting from the barren bowl,
sprouting like a crazed maze on the east hill,
whispers of pleasure unfold
to the crowning bloom of the daffodil.

Early the dawn arouses those sleeping and birds play
to tree treasures for housing while singing;
harmoniously their symphony unconducted but for
the sway of bare limb; buds bringing.

Stretching greedily the moist confines of fertility,
fingers of famished roots establish their ground.
Staking claim to replenish the soil, new growth renews,
darkened spirits thrive into a lush surround.
****
This is a rewrite of the poem "Spring"
written in 1999.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2003-05-05 09:52 PM

Early the dawn arouses those sleeping and birds play
to tree treasures for housing while singing;
harmoniously their symphony unconducted but for
the sway of bare limb; buds bringing.

Simply lovely. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

2 posted 2003-05-06 07:26 AM

Chris, thank you.

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2003-05-06 11:29 AM

What you describe is strikingly beautiful, yet simple... just like poetry should be. It quite reminds me of the work of one William Wordsworth. If only I'd ever seen such an image myself...

You have a marvelous way with words... the comparisons, descriptions, phrasing... all so perfect in this, it really made me smile.

Thank you for this.

Parasite

Poets are the unacknowledged legislators of the world.

~Percy Bysshe Shelley

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

4 posted 2003-05-06 03:04 PM

I am happy you smiled, Parasite, for it is worth a thousand words...
and one BIG THANK YOU seems insignificant
but it is certainly heartfelt.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2003-05-06 05:26 PM

Enjoyed...James

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

6 posted 2003-05-06 06:08 PM

James, thank you kindly.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2003-05-10 04:59 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, spring is just too beautiful to compose in a symphony so better just let everyone sing as they are, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dorene, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

8 posted 2003-05-10 09:48 PM

A smile, thank you, and hug to you also, Noah!

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