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Corinne
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0 posted 2003-05-05 07:06 PM


Moving Day

She isn’t ready to recreate herself -
this shifting of shape comes when it will,
sheds old skin in lifeless piles,
in empty rooms of houses she’ll abandon,

leaving the new owners to wonder
why they hear footfalls
down their darkened halls
and why extinct thoughts crawl into their dreams.

A hermit crab leaves its old home when it’s time,
when he finds a better shell
or can to occupy,
or if driven away by predators.

She cannot name her assailant,
perhaps she naively lets death
enter through unlocked doors.

She feels it coming, though -
long before the change,
long before moving day.





© 2003 Core


[This message has been edited by Corinne (05-05-2003 07:35 PM).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-05-05 07:11 PM



You're on a roll...
this is exceptional...
each line stands alone!

You're wonderful!  

wranx
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2 posted 2003-05-05 07:21 PM


Good lord! I'll say!

Awfully fine writing. An atmosphere that is real, but, as thin as onion skin...and as brittle.

Damn!

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2003-05-05 07:27 PM


I had a hermit crab when I was young...

Love the title too.

M

Corinne
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4 posted 2003-05-05 11:51 PM


Thank you kindly, as always for your wonderful words of encouragement, Sunshine!

Ed, "damn!" Alright, thank you!

Thank you, M!

Cor

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5 posted 2003-05-06 07:51 AM


nicely done Cor... nice indeed
Bridget Shenachie
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6 posted 2003-05-06 09:12 AM


Wow!  I've experienced this when moving and couldn't put it in to words.  Glad that you wrote it!  

Shenachie

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7 posted 2003-05-06 06:01 PM


You're always making me think about what you're saying. I love this.

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

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8 posted 2003-05-10 04:55 PM




(sigh) I just think time and time again we have to move on from place to place, for when a place feels too familiar to us, it just never feels like home anymore! (big hugggssssssss) This is powerful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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