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The Softer Hurt

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Martie
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The Softer Hurt

Wrapped around your swing of hand
you kissed me can you recall the way
I sang and turned you down that day
you said off-key the tune of us
but I knew what you really meant
was that I couldn't love you big enough.

I tried to flay the thief you kept
hidden behind your childhood's door
where your mother drank her words of love
and passed out cold on any floor
leaving you wondering  
how to turn off the pot of boiling stew
such magnitude was made for you.

So how could I climb the loving tree
no branch was strong enough you see
I was angry with the truth your cure
you threw at me from the open door
taking all the things that made you tall
leaving the shuttered infants sleeping still
with me to tell the reasons why for you.

Now past the years of your regret
forgiving is the softer hurt I give

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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Martie - I have also found that there are many kinds of hurt, some strong, and some soft, but they always seem to be there for some reason. Even if one trys to let it go...

BC
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You astound me woman. This was exceptional in the view, the delivery and the heartfelt intent. Well done. TD
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Martie
This is pure martie and I love it.
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Martie,  I have read others...said how
they were your best....I was wrong...
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Martie, I hadn't even read your poem until just now...

I sang and turned you down that day
you said off-key the tune of us


I guess we may have been on the same wavelength...

hugs
M
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You are SO amazing postess Martie!
You always leave me wanting more...
and staring at the screen.
This one is no expection.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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All the things unstated but so very -present-.... not just an elephant in the living room, but a herd of them, that you show us by exposing all the spaces around them, until their outlines become undeniable...

Well done, Martie. Well done.

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So how could I climb the loving tree
no branch was strong enough you see
I was angry with the truth your cure
you threw at me from the open door
taking all the things that made you tall
leaving the shuttered infants sleeping still
with me to tell the reasons why for you.

Now past the years of your regret
forgiving is the softer hurt I give


================================


You write with heart band-aids and leave me sighing and speechless....
Corinne
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How sad this is, Martie!

Corinne
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Yes...
yes...

thank you.
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My oh my Martie. Awesome. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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your words invite me to think of things often hidden for a long time - the touch of your poetry is so special as are you dear Martie - Paul
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So how could I climb the loving tree
no branch was strong enough you see
I was angry with the truth your cure
you threw at me from the open door
taking all the things that made you tall
leaving the shuttered infants sleeping still
with me to tell the reasons why for you.

Now past the years of your regret
forgiving is the softer hurt I give


Martie, even if it is a "softer hurt", it's still a hurt...isn't it?

Hugs, sweet Lady  
Ethel
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your pen remarkable
your words heart-felt
the intent touching
the result pleasing
           to the reader

......

regards,
sudhir
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I tried to flay the thief you kept
hidden behind your childhood's door

So much said in so few words... this is just wonderful.
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hugs my friend..

beautiful as always.

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Jeez Martie... you never cease to amaze me.

hugs you and I miss you.

Maree
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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, this is so very beautifully heartaching, sweet friend, this made me tear up to know your golden compassionate heart and how I know this ache too and it takes time to have the heart to forgive but know you are not alone! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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Pretty difficult to pick the best line or stanza out of this beautiful yet hurting poem.  So much soul pouring out.   KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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