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An Incomplete Stranger

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An Incomplete Stranger

Heís stopped to watch the squirrel
Iím watching, and it seems more
natural to make some strained talk
than not to, mostly about squirrels
and the day, stranger talk.
Thereís a bench, but it faces
the lake, and I canít face the lake
today, the ducks, the little waves
pushing a lake-scented breeze ashore.
Iíve sat there before, but never alone
and Ė never, alone.
Today one squirrelís enough,
and one stranger. I like the guy,
and Iím sorry when he leaves.
He was lonely, I can tell:
Who but a lonely man would
stop to watch a sqiuirrel?

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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Ed...The feeling in this poem is so powerful, yet understated.  You translate the emotion so well, of these two men, through the use of imagery and zeroing in on the other man's lonliness to tell your own.     
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Me.
Laughing, yet not laughing at this write. It shows great depth, an awareness and sensitivity to others, as well as to your own heart.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (05-04-2003 04:55 PM).]

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'Thereís a bench, but it faces
the lake, and I canít face the lake
today, the ducks, the little waves
pushing a lake-scented breeze ashore.
Iíve sat there before, but never alone
and Ė never, alone.'

Great moment, visually and poetically.  I'm sure many will recognize that bench and the squirrel...
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4 posted 05-04-2003 05:03 PM       View Profile for wranx   Email wranx   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wranx

Damn dude!
Sometimes, it seems that you and I write for the same yearbook.
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LOL@wranx!
I love the way you let us feel your own emotions here.
Very well done.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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A wonderful writer; such ability to put states of mind and heart in frame after frame of pictures of a moment in time.  Imagery terrific, as usual.
Love your writing.

Hugs, Pat

Ericc
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Very nicely done!
You take the reader on a far,interior, journey.
Thanks,
Eric
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Lonliness comes in all forms, an empty bench, a squirrel scampering, the changing seasons, or even the day that comes after tomorrow.

It's a reason for being here if nothing more or less.  

I liked the guy too.     Sometimes that's all it takes to fill the void.
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Thanks for allowing me this glimpse at a passing thought, it was well worth the read.
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Hey I have 3 squirrels that won't leave my trees, or barn or property. They are fun to watch and were playing tag the other day
*s

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I must be lonely...
I watch my squirrels all the time...

but the innuendo...
the double-dipping of meaning
you've left behind,
leaves more than one poem...
I think you left enough...
for an incomplete stranger
to take drift of, and delight in,
as well...

if only because you noticed...

thank you, Ed....
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Of all the friends a man may have, lonliness is the most enduring.

A great read; thanks for sharing it.
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Iíve sat there before, but never alone
and Ė never, alone.

You paint such vivid mind-images with your words we hear the ducks quack and see the swish of squirrel tail... poignancy lingers from these introspective lines. Beautiful write!
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