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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 2003-05-04 08:39 AM


Labyrinth of Emotion


Emotions fade from inside out,
Choked low beyond the fear and doubt;
Too harsh to tread the distant past,
Where mem’ries linger, long since cast.

Without release, without relent,
This seething brew of sentiment,
Takes hold the inner core of wait,
Beneath the host who guides their fate.

What once was dear, no longer dwells,
Within the vacant heart that swells;
A home to harbor misery,
In testament, for none to see.

Though long abandoned, still they rise,
Bereft of tears in hardened eyes;
The years have faded, truth be known,
Though anguish lurks through ashes blown.

Afraid to see, afraid to feel,
Unwilling to confront the real;
Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart.

Alone, alone ... they wither deep,
In silent quell of mem’ries keep;
A buried want, a hidden cry,
Entangled in the thoughts of why.


/Kit McCallum


© Copyright 2003 Kit McCallum - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-05-04 08:41 AM


So wonderful to see you grab a moment of write for yourself, and then share it with the rest of us.  Thank you for this treasure, Kit...layers and layers of wisdom and thought...
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2 posted 2003-05-04 08:43 AM


We've all been there, haven't we?  Emotions are such a driving force in our lives - and you express them better than just about anyone I know...

Kit - It's so wonderful to see you post (I should take the hint)... I really enjoyed this one - Did I mention that??...

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3 posted 2003-05-04 08:46 AM


Nice to read you again Kit.  A beautiful write!

Maree

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4 posted 2003-05-04 08:48 AM


Kit,
A buried want, a hidden cry,
Entangled in the thoughts of why.
Now your talking my language, LOL
You are a delight and even more so
your write.

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5 posted 2003-05-04 09:09 AM


So good to see your pearls of wisdom here this morn Kit.
You have left many thoughts for us to ponder today.
This is a gem!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 2003-05-04 09:53 AM


The years have faded, truth be known,
Though anguish lurks through ashes blown.

===========================

Well that couplet is cooler than a mere moth has words for
HEY YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bout time you got that beautiful smiling face of yours in here.
As always your gift of cadence sates my craving for rhymes divine.
Happy 3 year Pips anniversary me groovy gator gal
You will always be one of me fave girlies.


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7 posted 2003-05-04 10:03 AM


Afraid to see, afraid to feel,
Unwilling to confront the real;
Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart
****************************************
They all need to visit in this home, then they won't be so sad, or at least not alone.

CONGRATULATIONS, KIT! three years. Thank you for this gem, and for all the gems you gift us Pipsters.
(or should I say pipsqueeks?)

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8 posted 2003-05-04 10:17 AM


Afraid to see, afraid to feel,
Unwilling to confront the real;
Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart.

There are several forms of escaping, and this is the one I always use - Hiding... Thanks for sharing this, Kit!

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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9 posted 2003-05-04 05:53 PM


It makes no difference what you write about Kit, it's always a treat.
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10 posted 2003-05-04 05:58 PM


There is so much depth of 'need' in this poem..it's something different from you..I really enjoyed reading this side of you. You write emotions with such feeling.
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11 posted 2003-05-04 06:16 PM


Kit: I almost never come to Open Forum, but I'm so glad I got to read this wonderful poem.  Also came to congratulate you on marking your third year with Passions. I can see I need to check in here more often!

Best wishes
Betty Lou

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12 posted 2003-05-04 06:21 PM


around the labyrinth they go, in perfect rhythm, though mournful, so, well done, Kit, absolutely well done!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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13 posted 2003-05-04 06:24 PM


'Though long abandoned, still they rise,
Bereft of tears in hardened eyes;
The years have faded, truth be known,
Though anguish lurks through ashes blown.

Afraid to see, afraid to feel,
Unwilling to confront the real;
Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart.

Alone, alone ... they wither deep,
In silent quell of mem’ries keep;
A buried want, a hidden cry,
Entangled in the thoughts of why.'

Enjoyed much Kit.  Congratulations on your anniversary!  

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14 posted 2003-05-04 06:37 PM


This a awesome, wish you would post more, I love your writes.
Jason

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15 posted 2003-05-04 08:52 PM


Kit, it's so good to see you posting again.  As always you take a topic and run with it.  This is beyond excellent writing and of course am saving it in my libary   Welcome home kit!

Take care,
Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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16 posted 2003-05-04 09:22 PM


Kit...you are such a special lady, and person exceptional...it is always a pleasure to be able to read your poems of depth and beauty.  
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17 posted 2003-05-04 09:32 PM


wow....i don't know what else to say
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18 posted 2003-05-05 12:41 PM


very well done Kit........made me think of a current situation in my life.  And yes........i am stuck in the wonder of why.
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19 posted 2003-05-05 01:05 AM


I don't know how you can write so well with such feeling and emotion and reality...
but I'm sure glad you do!!!
Out of words, this is great

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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20 posted 2003-05-05 01:12 AM


Though long abandoned, still they rise,
Bereft of tears in hardened eyes;
The years have faded, truth be known,
Though anguish lurks through ashes blown.

Afraid to see, afraid to feel,
Unwilling to confront the real;
Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart.

Alone, alone ... they wither deep,
In silent quell of mem’ries keep;
A buried want, a hidden cry,
Entangled in the thoughts of why.



Kit, do you know just how real this is
right now?  Thank you for sharing this
wonderful write.

Hugs,
Ethel


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21 posted 2003-05-05 01:18 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kit, I know this labyrinth ever too well, sweet friend, that place where there is no safe place to put my hands and I am wandering aimlessly toward a horizon I'm unfamiliar with! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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22 posted 2003-05-05 04:07 AM


Suppressed before they ever start,
They simmer ‘neath a saddened heart.
Just how true and wise is this - for it is there they swell.
Alone, alone ... they wither deep,
In silent quell of mem’ries keep;
A buried want, a hidden cry,
Entangled in the thoughts of why.
And round and round they will go until the heart overtakes the mind

Oh Kit, you are so wise, and parts of this I unfortunately related to so much for they linger on and catch my breath at times.  

Is it ever good to read your work again, and this is so different for you, but most enjoyable.

                 

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23 posted 2003-05-05 08:09 AM


Dear Kit, lovely to be seeing some of your work again, I enjoyed this, we so often question why, it seems to invoke a challenge to our hearts to write of pain, even to this I don't know why, when saddened there appears to be a seed that blooms and hightens the will to share what we feel.
Thanks for sharing these thoughts, I feel them often, so often write.

Sincerely
Rick

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24 posted 2003-05-05 01:11 PM


Without release, without relent,
This seething brew of sentiment,
Takes hold the inner core of wait,
Beneath the host who guides their fate.

Maybe that's why many of us write... the pen is our safety valve... and we can spew feelings onto paper we couldn't acknowledge to another person for fear of judgment.

This speaks on so many levels... and every one reaches the heart. *S* Wonderful write!

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25 posted 2003-05-06 07:41 AM


Sunshine  Thanks for the lovely words Karilea. I’m glad I was able to finally pick up the pen again for a moment of reflection too.    

Nan  Thank you Nan … I think many of us have been here in some form or another. My weekend was full of “revisiting the past”, and this was the result I guess. It’s hard to go back in time (and yes … you need to write some more, my friend).

Dark Angel  Thanks so much Maree for the kind sentiments, I’m very appreciative.

Seymour Tabin:  You make me smile, Sy … Thank you for the delightful comment.

Enchantress:  I guess when I ponder, it’s best that it comes out on paper Nancy. Somehow, it helps to clear my mind. I’m grateful for that.  Thank you.

Janet Marie:  Thanks for the anniversary wishes JM, and thank you always, for your uplifting comments gator-gal.  You are always a "smile" to me.  Love ya.

Midnitesun:  Pipsters and proud of it.   Thanks so much for the wonderful comment Kacey, very much appreciated.

Mon Cherie:  Oh, I know the “hiding” plan well, Florence. I guess that’s where this piece comes from.  Some day these emotions will be allowed to bubble up and escape. Thanks for understanding.

Munda:   Thank you for the kind words, Munda. I really appreciate hearing that.

Poet deVine:  I’m glad this came across as a bit of a change Sharon, and thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it. Much appreciated, my friend.

Trillium:  Thanks so much for the well wishes and lovely response Betty Lou.  I’m so glad you stopped into Open and enjoyed the read.  Many thanks.

VAS:  What a beautiful phrase Virginia “around the labyrinth they go, in perfect rhythm, though mournful, so”. I think that in itself is a full poem waiting to happen, just lovely.

Duncan:   Thank you very much for the anniversary wishes and for letting me know you enjoyed this Duncan. I’m very grateful.

Jason Lyle:  I’m glad you enjoyed this Jason, and thank you so much for letting me know. Hopefully, I’ll be able to find some more time to write more. I really miss it.

Honeybee:  What a lovely thing to hear. Thank you Melissa for letting me know. I really appreciate it.

Martie:  It’s always a pleasure for me to read you as well Martie. Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed this one.

Edder:  LOL … I love that, thanks Edder.

Lisann:  So true … I think many of us are “stuck in the wonder of why” from many vantages Lisann. I’ve wondered how you are doing, and hope all is well?
    
GG:  Thanks you so much for this encouraging comment Alyssa, I am very appreciative.

Garysgirl:   It came from my own experience, Ethel, so unfortunately I do know the answer to your question.  I really appreciate your understanding and encouragment. Many thanks and hugs.

Mistletoe Angel:  You have such a lovely way of phrasing Noah “wandering aimlessly toward a horizon I'm unfamiliar with”.  Thanks for letting me know you related my friend. Much appreciated.
    
Mysteria:  I’m glad to know you enjoyed this piece Sharon. I think you and I are more alike than we realize sometimes. Many thanks for understanding and being you.

Rick:  What a beautiful response Rick. I think you’ve summarized very well, how these types of words end up in poetic form to be shared. Thank you for this.

Southern:   I think you’ve touched on one of my favorite traits of Passions, Ruth. There is no fear of judgment here,  and it’s a remarkable place to share sad thoughts as well as joyful. Thank you for the lovely comment.

With much appreciation to all,
/Kit

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26 posted 2003-05-08 12:36 PM


Was feeling this way myself tonight, so came back for another read and to give you a great big hug too hoping to kinda console each other via cyberspace I guess?  

Kit, I saw your comment after I read your poem and commented, now how funny is that?

[This message has been edited by Mysteria (05-08-2003 12:37 AM).]

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27 posted 2003-05-08 02:57 AM


Many can relate on such emotions, awesome gem you wrote and present us. Thank you for sharing dear Kit

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28 posted 2003-05-08 03:30 AM


wonderful writing! Nice to read you again...more...more!
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29 posted 2003-05-09 06:38 PM


Kit:

you are quite amazing
you know - the flow of this reminded
me of Dylan Thomas . . .
"Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night"

awesome write
xxoo

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30 posted 2003-05-09 06:53 PM


It's your anniversary but we got the presents (presence), how wonderful!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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31 posted 2003-05-09 08:09 PM


Ah, Kit, I'm sorry to see such sadness and despair drip from your pen....even though it drips in perfect cadence and style.

Fortunately I know (I think) that it's just a poem....one of the things you do so exceedingly well

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32 posted 2005-02-08 09:54 AM


This is so true...
and sadly, so familiar.
The days just disappear into dark,
empty, continued memories of loss.
You wrote of this so well I do hope
it isn't from experience.

Excellent rhyme, of course.
You speak powerfully...
Good to go back and read you.

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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