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Open Poetry #26

Last Call for Love

ptwils165
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 50

0 posted 2003-05-03 08:15 PM

Searching for a symmetry,
a face that turns the night
from heavy shelves of vain regret
to hopes of dawn-blessed light;

watching through an empty glass,
a local room in town;
a smile that shows the world is young
in seconds steals a frown

and in walks love, without a sound
no clattered, chattered doors;
a simple thing delayed by words
and eyes at grounded floors

the cliché of a racing heart
becomes a thump so real,
to wake the man so sorry now
once praying not to feel;

descriptions of her hair, these eyes,
temptations failed by lines
that try to write a simple thing:
of Love – the certain signs.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2003-05-03 08:50 PM

Very well written,
in these lines is held the secret.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-05-03 09:12 PM

Wonderful writing. I like this a great deal. Deeply felt, and written with such skill..

"and in walks love, without a sound
no clattered, chattered doors;
a simple thing delayed by words
and eyes at grounded floors

the cliché of a racing heart
becomes a thump so real,
to wake the man so sorry now
once praying not to feel;

descriptions of her hair, these eyes,
temptations failed by lines
that try to write a simple thing:
of Love – the certain signs"

this just touches.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (05-03-2003 09:14 PM).]

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

3 posted 2003-05-03 10:01 PM

the cliché of a racing heart

loved these lines!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

4 posted 2003-05-04 05:29 AM

So few posts for such talent?

Do you have more, would like to read them...

Richy

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