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Mystery to Me
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Mystery to Me |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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You are the space surrounding my heart ache scattered like puzzle pieces contours and soft edges dreamscapes of blue appealing to me. Silent murmurs entwine insistent as a steady breeze billowing through the window of my mind skimming over the sea releasing the churning within. Immersed in the rise and fall as deep and wide as the waves that roll in full aware, of my fluttering soaring in the shadows of lost lovers you are my favorite song, and all that inspires me. Slow dancing across my thoughts ever silent and swift in your movements you are minutes at a time, the essence of my ecstasy the back drop of my peace and serenity. You are the glimmer of hope, glistening in the middle of the night shape shifting my calm with intent befitting in the moonlight. You are my sky in the stars the view from my eyes a place in heaven, slipping in you are my passion in disguise an unsolved mystery to me. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-03-2003 04:33 PM).] |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
BluesSerenade...The imagery in this poem is just astounding. But the full impact of emotion is felt through each carefully chosen word. This piece is BRILLIANT!!!! ***Ivy Rose |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is stunningly beautiful...I could not stop reading til the end....flows wonderfully... Hugs, Pat  [This message has been edited by regards2you (05-03-2003 05:44 PM).] |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Wow I have only been here a short while but at every turn there is another beautiful piece of poetry. Nothing inspires me more than great talent, and it has been awhile since I have been inspired so. BluesSerenade this is a very lovely poem. “You are my favorite song.” And the way three of your stanzas start with “You are” remind me of a poem that I wrote titled “Your My Everything” which I will post. It doesn’t compare to your beautiful poem, but hey, part of why we’re here is to learn right? I’m looking forward to seeing what other treasures lie around the bend... Take Great Care, Richy |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Creating  s again, are you?  Richy, you have it so right... one of the biggest fortunes you will find here in Passions, is one poet, inspiring another... and this, on her 3,000th post... Aren't we smiling now!  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Slow dancing across my thoughts ever silent and swift in your movements you are minutes at a time, the essence of my ecstasy the back drop of my peace and serenity.' You're writing some great poetry! Must be the ocean air... ! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Beautiful! This has a tidal ebb and flow to it which parallels the imagery. Very nicely done. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, this is so beautiful...all of it..... but this just reached out and grabbed me.... You are the glimmer of hope, glistening in the middle of the night shape shifting my calm with intent befitting in the moonlight. May be the moonlight and me conjuring up thoughts in my mind of me and my Honey-Love...  Hugs, Ethel |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I could not possibly dissect this piece to pick a single line or set of lines, as the entire poem would be posted in my comment. You certainly have the imagery all together in this one and congratulations also on posting of 3,000. Your poetry adds so much to these forums and you are of course one of my favorites. |
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ljossberir Member
since 2003-05-04
Posts 81Ny, USA |
I agree with you Ivy Rose, this poem's imagery is masterful. Amazing work! -matt |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh...yes! what a great piece! in the library it goes! very touching, Blues, very touching indeed! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - one lucky person... BC |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
THIS, is what I mean by your newfound "voice". Your BluesSerenades become clearer, more melodic. (just look at the comments that your writes are receiving) yep. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Ivy Rose~ You are such a dear, and I thank you sincerely. Pat~ Thank you for the stunning, and for always being here. hugs~ Richy~ Thanks for the praise and finding some enjoyment in what I've written here. I appreciate it very much. Karilea~ You've made me smile so bright...thank you. Duncan~ Must be SOMETHING in the air, but I'm not saying. Thanks you.. Icebox~ I'm so happy to see you here. I hope you plan on sticking around. Thanks so much for reading. Ethel~ I'm glad to know it conjured up some honey love thoughts for you. Mysteria~ Thank you for your nice reply, your comments warm my heart in ways I can't begin to tell you. Matt~ Nice to see a new face here, thank you and *welcome* Hugs Dixie~ I was afraid you might be upset with me. Thank you for reading me sweet poetess. I'm so glad we're on the same page. BC~ It's just my imagination, running away from me, (again) I thank you kindly. Oh, so that's what you mean, ok, that's good to know. Yep, it is. Thank you wranx~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy: this one IS a song - truly soaring in the shadows of lost lovers you are my favorite song, and all that inspires me. how lovely put - *wink* glad you are here tweets xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (05-05-2003 01:55 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You are the glimmer of hope, glistening in the middle of the night shape shifting my calm with intent befitting in the moonlight ************************************ love those shape shifters! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Tweety~ Thanks for the wink, I knew you would understand my song. Kacy~ Shift shapers have a way of changing things, that's for sure, as long my calm doesn't get away from me I'm in good shape. Thanks.[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-04-2003 02:24 PM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A truly wonderful write. A concentration of beauty. Love, Margherita |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A concentration, hmmm... yes I guess it is! Thank you for that Margherita. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori...wonderful to feel this about someone, and to be felt about this way...love at its finest. Such a beautiful poem!!! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lori, you don't post a lot of numbers, you just post awesome numbers, congrats on nr. 3000....happy for ya... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You are the glimmer of hope, glistening in the middle of the night shape shifting my calm with intent befitting in the moonlight. You are my sky in the stars the view from my eyes a place in heaven, slipping in you are my passion in disguise an unsolved mystery to me. ============================== I dont know what makes me more envious... that you live by the beach... that you are this high inspired... or that I didnt write this beautiful poem. Ok...you win on all 3 counts.  this is LOVELY poetess Lori!! You're the best I've ever felt ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Martie~ Barry~ and Janet Marie~ I hold all three of you in such high regard, please know your replies mean a great deal to me. I don't always know what to say, or how to express my sincere gratitude. Thank you so much for sharing my happiness. With love and hugs, respectfully~ |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
This is gorgeous, and congrats on 3000!  ~Elizabeth Waited on a line of greens and blues, just to be the next to be with you.. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
an unsolved mystery to me. sometimes that's the best..it's solving the mystery or unraveling the illusion that ruins things sometimes grin great writing bluesy |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Lori, this is wonderful, sweet friend, and perhaps the space around will always be somewhat of a mystery but I'd rather go on vacation there then have to fear getting lost again! (smiles) This is sooooooo lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sometimes u catch a glimpse of the rainbow, and then it just passes by but.....ooh this is nice. blues dear you are my passion in disguise an unsolved mystery to me. sometimes left as a mystery is best |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
If I were asked to write something, just one thing in my life, this would have been it. If ever words could love, these do. If ever heart and soul could be put on paper, you’ve placed them there. If ever someone could touch another, you’ve done it here. You’ve done everything in one piece that I’ve strived to do in many. I bow to the master. jwesley |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Can you ever write! I loved every line of this love mystery!  Warm hugs, Linda |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"you are my passion in disguise an unsolved mystery to me." This poems gently holds the reader in its grip. Had to visit it again. Thank you for sharing this. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this one too. Unsolved, that is. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your wonderful replies warm my heart in so many ways. I thank you all for leaving them for me. I really do!! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
"You are the glimmer of hope, glistening in the middle of the night shape shifting my calm with intent befitting in the moonlight." That's a really good strophe poet... |
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