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A New Blond Waitress

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A New Blond Waitress

She’s too pretty, this one,
long things nicely long,
round things nicely round,
won’t be a waitress forever
and hasn’t been one before.

She makes up for it with dimples
and blond hair, a chin that
shyly touches her shoulder
as she takes our order,
swings over to the kitchen,
sweet from this side too.

Before the order’s up, she’s
passed a dozen times, knows
I’m looking, shows it with a turned-in
smile, lips tucked, liking it even though
I’m old enough to be...me.
My wife hasn’t noticed, but she has.

By the time she brings our food
she’s smiling before I look, playing
tag and winning, jeans tight,
riding a shave low under the white
halter, skin between just wider
than my hand. Now there’s a thought.

She’s moving all the time,
bringing things, refilling my glass,
then the check, a laugh in her voice
that hasn’t faded with use....
One last swing by with change.
And what will be my tip?    

Enough.
© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-03-2003 12:36 AM       View Profile for QjQ   Email QjQ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for QjQ

my my how the blond takes our eyes away on a journey of mystery,

nice write!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

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2 posted 05-03-2003 06:58 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I always notice the waitresses...and they don't even have to be blond...James
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3 posted 05-03-2003 07:02 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

lol, only you, could write it like this.. only you!
Its exquisite!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
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4 posted 05-03-2003 07:38 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

smile...a little game of tag and sexual tension. You write it well, m'friend.
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Grins. You put me there watching you, watching her, watching you...

Nicely written,

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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You only think the wife didn't see...



We let you see...
then bring you home.

Enjoyed the view...

and the grin on your face.
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7 posted 05-03-2003 11:01 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Ed...I have to agree with Sunshine...the wife sees these things, you just don't see that she sees.  Sounds like you had fun.  
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8 posted 05-03-2003 11:10 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

  

Oh yes, Mr. Ed....the wife sees, but so does the waitress. She knows how to get her tips. LOL

A good write. I could see you looking and the waitress flirting. LOL

Hugs,
Ethel
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By the time she brings our food
she’s smiling before I look, playing
tag and winning, jeans tight,
riding a shave low under the white
halter, skin between just wider
than my hand. Now there’s a thought.

So subtle, but I wouldn't bet that you or she is fooling anyone. She's just doing her job, and since the customer always comes first.  Uh huh, uh huh.     

Fun write~

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-03-2003 11:12 AM).]

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Naw, she was completely a rookie... you could see it in the way she handled things.

....but causing every man in the place to get a whiplash, and shyly loving every minute of it.

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Now here's a thought...  

I know the feeling of public flirting... it can be bothersome, especially when your significant other is right with you.  It's still kind of fun, even if it's a little risky... and it doesn't make you naughty, just daring.  

Nicely written, Ratleader... I enjoyed reading this.

Parasite

[This message has been edited by Local Parasite (05-03-2003 07:01 PM).]

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She doesn't happen to work at Denny's on Sixth street does she???

Oh well... just checking...


Great Fun!

Richy


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ROTFL.. Sunshine is right...

Nice introspective write, RL..
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Ratleader - I see that someone has caught someone eye. Now if you could just point the way, I'll pay a visit...

BC
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15 posted 05-06-2003 12:18 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Before the order’s up, she’s
passed a dozen times, knows
I’m looking, shows it with a turned-in
smile, lips tucked, liking it even though
I’m old enough to be...me.
My wife hasn’t noticed, but she has.

Wanna bet? LOL Ratette's just wise enough to know the difference between looking at the menu and placing an order. LOL

I love this snapshot of life you've captured and shared... excellent write! *S*
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(chuckling).... Ed... you captured this in wonderful style...

enjoyed.
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Loved this Ed, brought me right there and left me with the fear that Mrs. Rat would look up any second and chop off your head for it..least I hope its your head..ouch
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Rat...it's time to go back there again...tell her you want a "Sheepherder's Dinner"....she'll ask what that is...tell her "It's a little bit of ewe"......then, leave her a good tip if she doesn't slap you.....leave her a great tip if she agrees.
Very interesting way with words pal....liked this one...
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and a BUMP to the top before Mrs. Rat bumps your head with a frying pan!  Very visualllll!
          Sadelite
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20 posted 06-13-2005 12:40 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I was thinking of this recently... glad your post in Announcements gave me the incentive to pay it another visit... Delightful write! *S*
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