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Balloon Hat

A clown made me.
Im entirely constructed of
long colorful balloons, mostly pink,
turned into shapes and twisted to make
em stay. Dont pop me, ok? Or if you do, try
to pop somethng that wont tweak my shape too
much, turn me into something grotesque? Meanwhile
here I stand, or maybe I could ride around on your head for
a while, to see the rest of the circus? I dont weigh much, and I
really dont look too bad, considering the surroundings. So take me
along, will you? I might be good for a laugh or two, and I promise, I wont
pop you.


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1 posted 05-02-2003 10:39 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Yes...
I loved when
others wore these...
I smiled at them, and
they smiled back at me!
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What a relatable and clever 'shape' poem!  You've proven that you can do any style and write about any topic. A cool write~

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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Abracadabra!
I love this!!
And I'm keeping it...
For my own reasons....
We're in the business..  
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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I won't pop you, if you don't pop me! But dear balloon, you have nothing to fear from me! A popping balloon scares the angel breath right out of me!

Delightful write, Mr. Rat!

EA
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Ed...I can picture this so well...and it smiles, it does.  
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Somehow I think the subject is more than about ballons or maybe I am reading into it too much. Either way it is an interesting poem and thank you for sharing.

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Yep, I'm made of balloons, you're made of balloons, and we shouldn't pop each other, or abandon each other in this circus we find ourselves in......

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I love how you weave your words and meaning....it makes for a delightful read every time....


LAuren~

Through the darkness
I can see your light
And you will always shine
And I can feel your heart in mine

I will remember you

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wow...that is so cute! I really like that!
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Dont pop me, ok? Or if you do, try
to pop somethng that wont tweak my shape too
much, turn me into something grotesque? Meanwhile
here I stand, or maybe I could ride around on your head for
a while, to see the rest of the circus?

I love the shape you've achieved with your words. *S* But even more, I love these lines... they could so easily be someone begging for acceptance as they are without contortions to fit some preconceived notion... sometimes we need to be seen with a balloon hat on our heads. *S*

Yanno... it's dangerous making a blonde think! LOL
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Merlin: "Never worry too much what a woman is thinking; they don't do it very often..."

Arthur: "But what do you DO, while they're doing it???"

                                Camelot

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I don't remember now whether I've said how the poem pair was written -- there were balloons in the restaurant where I wrote "A New Blond Waitress" http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum79/HTML/001052.html .....and that started me on Ballon Hat. I wrote both of them with a blue crayon, on the back of a kiddie menu....

Seeing me go get the menu and crayons, then start writing "Hat," was what started the pretty waitress swapping smilies with me in the first place....and gave me the other poem. Later I got true pleasure from the fact that she didn't know I was now taking notes and writing about HER as she gave me those little smiley looks and wiggled her stuff -- in sheer amusement at my writing anything in such a ridiculous way.....

.......and that's the rest of the story.....

...except for the fact that I have a tremendous urge to go back to Spoons Restaurant and hand her the two poems...and the menu....

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The "rest of the story" makes this even more of a delight... I think of this poem every time I see balloons twisted into a shape... and the smile is for more than the child carrying them. *S*
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