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Mon Cherie
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0 posted 2003-05-02 09:00 AM


It has been days
The rain keeps falling
In slates of heavy downpour
In sprinkles of shower passing

Heaven must know how I feel
The persistant ache in my heart
Coz the skies are crying
The tears I am holding back so hard

I feel so weak and tired
From giving so much
I know not what to do now
Coz my heart has been ripped apart

I just want to hide and sleep
Never again coming awake
Unless there should be a happy ending
Else I'd rather be nailed and staked


_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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1 posted 2003-05-02 01:30 PM


nice thoughts and feelings expressed

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2 posted 2003-05-02 02:22 PM


I too get gloomy thoughts when it rains and rains and rains... I do hope that some sunny weather and some smiles are forcasted in your near future though. God bless.

-Bob


Had to return to vote for this one. Good job.

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3 posted 2003-05-02 03:41 PM


Nice expression of your feelings...James
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4 posted 2003-05-03 09:14 AM


QjQ:
Thank you... At the time I wrote it, I really felt that blue...

Lighthousebob:
Thanks Bob. Back in sunny island Singapore, it's sunshine everyday...

JamesMichael:
Thank you James!

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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5 posted 2003-05-04 10:28 PM


So i guess you have moved on from there? and nay, i didn't find this melodramatic or Hallmarkish--i think you ended the poem at a good time, without dragging it on


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6 posted 2003-05-05 09:39 AM


Yo!!!! Thanks for the support friend!

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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7 posted 2003-05-09 10:38 PM


you can count for more than just support from me, dude..
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8 posted 2003-05-09 10:40 PM


I guess we all have these feelings sometimes very nice poem

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

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9 posted 2003-05-09 11:23 PM




(big hugggsssssss) There too are days when I feel hopeless watching the rain pour down and there are no colors in the horizon, but then there are other days I see the rain basically as a rejuvenation, a cleansing and if we embrace it we may find new colors before our eyes the moment the prisms shine through! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Florence, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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10 posted 2003-05-10 01:05 AM


Many times have a felt the same, good write, and so easy to relate too, you expressed your feelings very well, keep up the great work
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11 posted 2003-05-10 01:09 AM


This is good.....
Crying is a good release!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


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12 posted 2003-05-10 02:43 AM


kaile:
Hehe.... Thanks for bringing this back on top...

carol:
Thanks for reading, Rita... And I love your signature... It's so true about friends.

Mistletoe Angel:
Yes, Noah... sometimes it does seem that the rain is washing everything unhappy away from the face of this earth. And a rainbow will be out after the rain...

jaysh:
Thank you for reading, Jaysh.

Justbleu:
Yeah, I agree, Bridgette. Crying is a good release. One can think so much better after a burst of tears...

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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13 posted 2003-05-10 12:04 PM


enjoy the day, we are all here with a hug when you need it
and then a big push, back up to the stars

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14 posted 2003-05-12 09:10 AM


Thanks for reading, Midnitesun

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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15 posted 2003-05-13 08:53 AM


this can go on for a while...
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16 posted 2003-05-13 10:20 AM


yeah, juz like a game of badminton

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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