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RobertB
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Champaign, IL

0 posted 2003-05-01 06:40 PM



Poor Paul


Poor Paul, his eyes let you feel
that he’s in no way been kissed
by anyone other than his mother
and in the look of his hands one can notice
the nearest and dearest thing he has held
are the cigarettes that burn in the night
just around the corner of the farmhouse
a beacon to the solitude of dark.

Poor Paul only leaves home
to look at the fields
and think of the nighttime
when his eyes are busy
and his hands will be numb fumbling
the last drop of the day
wishing that such satisfaction
could be had in something more substantial.

Poor Paul only really leaves home
when he closes his eyes.

Robert

PS: forgive me for being away so long....though I needed it. The solitude.

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Startime55
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1 posted 2003-05-01 07:40 PM


ah...sometimes solitude is very inspiring....Well done....

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
2 posted 2003-05-01 07:46 PM


Fantastic write!!
Welcome Home....
stick around so I can get to know you through your poetry.
I look forward to seeing more of your writing.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

davidmerriman
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3 posted 2003-05-01 07:50 PM


i liked this.

Simple, yet has a great meaning to it. I think every guy can relate to Paul at one point or the other.

Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2003-05-01 09:57 PM


OhRobertB~
You're back in wonderful penning fashion !

Believe me, you've been missed by this lady~

Seems the 'solitude' gave you time to spend with a talented muse~

Welcome home~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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whiskey
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5 posted 2003-05-01 10:01 PM


I liked this although simply written it made me think about all sorts of things. I think poor paul is someone we all know or have known in our lives at one time or another.


Julie

RobertB
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Champaign, IL
6 posted 2003-05-02 06:20 PM


Thank you all for reading and replying.

Marge, I appreciate the e-mails all along. I never forgot you!!

Paul is a true-life charactor.... my neighbor up the road.

I have only spoken to him less than a dozen times in 13 years....but I know this poem is right on.


Robert

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