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Shlee
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0 posted 2003-05-01 05:18 PM


Confusion and frustration
So much miscommunication
We're now in a spot
Always thought I could not, would not
Now we've got a plan
We put it in His hand
I'll stick with it
You won't ditch it
Constantly asking help from Him
Crossing to the right side of a line so thin
It's a heavy burden relieved
We're fixing it, hard to be believed
I know we can do it
You, me, and Him-sticking through it

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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-05-01 05:48 PM


*You, me, and Him-sticking through it


the last lines tell it all

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Shlee
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2 posted 2003-05-01 06:53 PM


I'm glad that's the way you see it   Thanks

~~~This is quite different from my usual style so I was/am a little unsure about it...

Shlee

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