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Thomas119gold
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0 posted 2003-05-01 12:03 PM



Sweet dreams
never seems

waking up
unfinished thought

close eyes
try again


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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2003-05-01 01:37 PM


nice
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2 posted 2003-05-01 01:46 PM


I liked this, Thomas
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3 posted 2003-05-01 02:27 PM



Oh, that they could be recaptured.

Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat


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Margherita
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4 posted 2003-05-01 03:08 PM


Thomas that's just so true, well said.

Yes surely we often try again!!
Almost never succeeding!

Thank you.
Love, Margherita

poetSeaMaiden
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5 posted 2003-05-02 08:36 AM


Oh man - I never CAN go back to the good ones, but let me tell you, if I've got some crazy serial killer on my rear, or if a tornado is after me, I won't wake up until after I'm already toast, you know? *sigh* My dreams suck, and these little lines of yours are FANTASTIC! Gosh you've evoked some "been there, done that" from people! Amazing work with so few words! BRAVO!

~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

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6 posted 2003-05-02 08:38 AM


I forgot to add, I know this wasn't suppose to make me *giggle* but it did.

Those last four little words just sounded so "innocent and sweet" from a man like you. HA! Great read!!!

Thomas119gold
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7 posted 2003-05-02 11:11 AM


Man like me?

Oh the Rogue

littlewing
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8 posted 2003-05-02 06:26 PM


Thomas:

this is brilliant!


hehe looking at your critique message
I used to live in neverneverland when I first came here . . .
xxoo

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