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Temptress
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0 posted 2003-05-01 03:32 AM





Tonight
when my hands can't sleep
I am here in this familiar glow
thinking of your hands
and where I wish they were.
Seems like I drown in our down time
comtemplating things
and dreams
and wholehearted schemes
to get your world a little closer to mine.
It was always these late hours
when I would fall in love
and your voice
mere hours away
would cross snow to see me to my dreams.
Tonight
I am thinking of your
and five times died in the drift
of the thought
of your kisses
in multicolored places
within me
and outside of me.
Have you thought of me
the same hours
that I have thought of you?

lovingly,
forever moonlight

You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL

© Copyright 2003 Jennifer - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-05-01 06:48 AM


There are a number of lines in here that are simply wonderful...

~*~

when my hands can't sleep

...I drown in our down time
comtemplating things
and dreams
and wholehearted schemes

... your voice
mere hours away
would cross snow to see me to my dreams.

...I am thinking of you
and five times died in the drift
of the thought
of your kisses

lovingly,
forever moonlight

~*~

Yep...these were the ones that made me smile...

Margherita
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2 posted 2003-05-01 07:36 AM


Yes your words touched some chords deep within .... very beautiful!
Love, Margherita

Mon Cherie
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3 posted 2003-05-01 07:58 AM


This is so touching!

Tonight
I am thinking of your
and five times died in the drift
of the thought
of your kisses
in multicolored places
within me
and outside of me.
Have you thought of me
the same hours
that I have thought of you?


My sentiments exactly...

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-05-01 08:03 AM


Jennifer, I loved the whole poem, but this
part really spoke to my heart...

Tonight
I am thinking of your
and five times died in the drift
of the thought
of your kisses
in multicolored places
within me
and outside of me.
Have you thought of me
the same hours
that I have thought of you?


My Honey-Love and I  actually talk about this
when we are apart. I love it.  
Hugs,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (05-01-2003 08:05 AM).]

whiskey
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5 posted 2003-05-01 10:06 AM


This is lovely I love the way it flowed and the feeling that it told. I could feel

Julie

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2003-05-01 10:17 AM


Temptress
A lovely write and I enjoyed the read.

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2003-05-01 10:50 AM


Seems like I drown in our down time
comtemplating things
and dreams

Temptress, what a beautiful pouring out of the moonlight and all those dreams we hold.

I really loved the soft glowing.

So nice!

[This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-02-2003 11:31 AM).]

JP
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8 posted 2003-05-01 11:18 AM


You are like fine wine and romance, getting better and better as time goes on... excellent work here my dear.

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
Nil Desperandum, Fata viem invenient

Brad Majors
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9 posted 2003-05-01 01:40 PM


temptress this is a beautiful piece!
Moonlight Romeo
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10 posted 2003-05-01 01:42 PM


I am quite sure that he has.

Thank you.

Peace is the only battle worth waging.
--- Albert Camus

Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-05-01 02:45 PM


stunning work as usual
Gnubbin
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12 posted 2003-05-01 10:02 PM


you should be careful, lest Luna grow even more jealous, because of your beauty and the beauty of your thoughts in her light, she may be tempted to hide it from you if this kind of thing persists
this is an excellent piece

Gnub

there ain't no lovin'
like Gnub Gnubbin's lovin'

Enchantress
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13 posted 2003-05-01 10:05 PM


Beautiful Jenn!!
Very much enjoyed your lovely imagery.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel
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14 posted 2003-05-01 10:21 PM




(big hugggssssssss) I think there truly are times two can simply think of one the same time as another simuotaneously by the clocks hand of destiny! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is very heartfelt, here's wishing you great tidings always, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

QjQ
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15 posted 2003-05-01 11:01 PM


Very romantic write!!!!

It matters not how you answer, It matters only that i hear you.

Janette
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16 posted 2003-05-02 12:46 PM


I am certain that he has...

Lovely!

Sven
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17 posted 2003-05-06 12:52 PM


yes. . . it's good to see you again. . .this is the kind of work that you do best. . .



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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Charisma
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18 posted 2003-05-07 02:47 PM


lovely and touching penned. enjoyed the read as always

Charisma

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