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termite
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0 posted 2003-04-29 11:55 PM



every moment gives you
itself
and we end up tying ourselves up
in something so lenient

and we tightwalk through the halls
banging on the doors to get a room

just close your eyes and make believe
they say
don't look into the dark just breathe in the smoke
they say
you're better off without a light just
convince yourself you have one

it doesn't ask us to pet it

it doesn't ask us to believe

it doesn't ask us to breathe

but we grade the papers with the red pen
paint the sky a different color
deny that our shadow is our own


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passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-04-30 12:56 PM


this touches me very deeply, you just cannot know how deep
Justbleu
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2 posted 2003-04-30 09:53 AM


This is intrigueing to me....
Enjoyed!!!!
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


Martie
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3 posted 2003-04-30 10:48 PM


termite....every moment gives you
itself

This opening line...Yes!  

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4 posted 2003-04-30 10:59 PM




(sigh) Your writing is so novel and poignant, sweet friend, it is always worth trying to paint the sky a new color, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

quatro
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5 posted 2003-04-30 11:30 PM


Thought provoking indeed.  Gives the mind something to thing about.

quatro

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