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On Freeway 57
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On Freeway 57 |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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On the Freeway 57 (more delivery girl blues) An instant to change time in a splash of metal across the asphalt in slow motion sling shot to fast to make arrangements I bring my own reflections pass me by this time oh cloud destiny is a fickle wind a rock that falls before you in a dare with who aware I feel the impact of her fear enclosed with country western song can smell the burning rubber feel the pull of gravity is wrong like a rope I’m tied to my place in this I see the color of her hair is dark and through the choke of her car’s last sigh I see her mind in bas relief inside of mine somehow I know her stumble fear and even this after I’m gone can feel her lean against the fabric of time in tears the center divider of the southbound lane this cement becomes a trusted friend that she can feel some safety in --------- just a little explanation...I own a flower shop and often Im the delivery girl...have a few stories to tell..this one happened today [This message has been edited by Martie (04-30-2003 11:15 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A minute to change time... ~*~ This starts the story... of course, of course... but you add to it so much more... in its felt, and resonance... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - see that green pickum up truck? Just follow it to the cafe, and I'll buy you a coffee treat, and sing one of them songs... BC |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
OKAY ! That's it ! Can you find ANY reasonable explanation for the fact that my entire conversation with your honey played through my mind last night as I turned and tossed trying to find slumber ? 'destiny is a fickle wind' Oh my Sis ... ~ I hold you close in my  thoughts~*Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ouch! The 57 will do that to you -- been on that road a few times myself....looking safe and serene then suddenly Holy Cow, back to driving school! Or to be more specific, exactly what you just played through my mental VCR with this.... thanks, I think.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wow....excellent powerful words...wonderfully done as alwasy martie |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...is this the San Gabriel Freeway...or is that the 55? Haven't been home for awhile...james |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, this is very heartfelt, sweet friend, I send you heart hugs in hoping all turns out well, this is very captivating, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
James...the 57 goes through Brea and Fullerton from the 210 to the 5. I'm sure you miss California, but must be nice to call Hawaii your home. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
powerful piece! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - many drives on many roads in many visits to So Cal and the 57 is one that has memories you touched very strongly with this write - Paul |
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