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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2003-04-29 09:26 AM


us and them

together there’s not much we could do then
so we split into our ‘own’ decent groups
of people who liked each other very much
and spoke good things always
of one another

so much good was said that
bad felt like an insult hurled
like a dead smelly rat into the sewer
and soon,
pride became our lies-infested crown
a forte with growing fault-lines

that’s when I realised that I missed them

them that said I was wrong
them that said I could be better
for I needed them to say it black
for I wanted to grow
from black and white to grey
and from grey shades to colours

yes, I am sure I miss them
because
amongst all that speak good of me
there must be at least a few that say
there are things that should be done better
and that there are other ways

I want us with me as well
for praise is priced thrice as gold
and it brings comfort too
parcelled in extra-large bags
cushioned with selfless adore

yet, somehow, I feel
us and them belong together
so what if we don’t get along as well
can’t time mend the broken lines
and replace them with
hair-line fractures

--------

sincerely don't know why I wrote this, but since I did write it, I share it here... thanks all...

© Copyright 2003 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-04-29 09:35 AM


yes, I am sure I miss them
because
amongst all that speak good of me
there must be at least a few that say
there are things that should be done better
and that there are other ways

My goodness Sudhir.....these are extraordinary words! Yes, we need "them", as this is how we learn to improve ourselves, or how to remain as we are, and also to learn compassion for others. This is a wonderful read this morning. Thankyou for it and your smile. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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2 posted 2003-04-29 09:37 AM


My friend.. the lesson inside this is wise beyond the years your picture show you to be...
we all need both sides of this coin you flipped out here for us to bet on.. heads or tails we win... because we are always walking the edges of acceptance and rejection.. a 50-50 chance we will find balance over time...

enjoyed this more than I can tell you...


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3 posted 2003-04-29 10:39 AM


enjoyed this
regards2you
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4 posted 2003-04-29 10:50 AM



Sudhir,

I am so glad you are posting here more often.

I enjoy the thoughts in this poem tremendously and that you were able to write it poetically and come across with such truths. Mind touching and balancing.

Enjoyed,
Hugs, Pat


..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2003-04-29 11:28 AM


I want us with me as well
for praise is priced thrice as gold
and it brings comfort too
parcelled in extra-large bags
cushioned with selfless adore

And open mind, and a forgiving heart
is a large part of the beauty that
radiates from within.  

You are so talented Sudhir~  
and always a pleasure to read.


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6 posted 2003-04-29 12:56 PM


Amazing write here Sudhir!
You are wise beyond your years!
Thank you for this.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2003-04-29 04:29 PM


Enjoyed...James
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8 posted 2003-04-29 04:47 PM


Sudhir, what a priceless gem of truth you
have written here. I love it all, but this part
really summed it all up for me....

yes, I am sure I miss them
because
amongst all that speak good of me
there must be at least a few that say
there are things that should be done better
and that there are other ways

I want us with me as well
for praise is priced thrice as gold
and it brings comfort too
parcelled in extra-large bags
cushioned with selfless adore


I know that I need both "them"  and  "us".
The  "them"  has always kept me trying harder,
and the  "us"  has always gives me the courage
to try harder and to have confidence in the
who  I am.

Thank you for sharing this with us.
Hugs,    
Ethel


[This message has been edited by garysgirl (04-29-2003 04:49 PM).]

quatro
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9 posted 2003-04-29 05:32 PM


Sudhir,

WOW!  You are a young man who definately has a heart.  One who cherishes friends and family to the utmost.  You are a treasure to whomever you come in contact with.  Keep writing, even when you don't understand why.  You have a lot to say.

Thanks for sharing.
quatro

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
10 posted 2003-04-29 05:44 PM


yet, somehow, I feel
us and them belong together
so what if we don’t get along as well
can’t time mend the broken lines
and replace them with
hair-line fractures

If only that were true...

You write with such flair.
I admire you.
M

Sudhir Iyer
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
11 posted 2003-04-30 10:03 AM


Thank you all so very much...

Regards,
Sudhir

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