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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-04-29 03:09 AM



worship the Spring of life
    
It pulses with the water
that brings
the new

the swelling green of future

a secret smile
that sprouts
from the womb
of awakened earth

to dance

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1 posted 2003-04-29 03:40 AM


to dance...and run and hide from the one in pajamas with the shotgun who drank too much last night

bring the roosters indoors!

really, a great write...makes me want to stay up till dawn

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2003-04-29 03:51 AM


I think I counted 32 words.

And I keep trying to tell you how profound it is to me, that you are able to affect the emotion that you do, with just such a splash of word.

You are amazing bri.

And now I COULD go on the soapbox, about how you don't believe in YOU--but I won't. I COULD say how you are like the aesthetic artist, taking splashes of paint, effecting and affecting the canvass, convincing the eye
to color blend where emotions only halfway dare to go--but I won't. I could say how you remind me a bit of a man possessed? grin?
suffering, in his angst, against the weave of the canvassed backdrop, with so much more to say--but I WON'T. I could say a whole lot more, knowing, where each word hit home, in hopes that all will understand? and you KNOW I won't. I just hope, they all see it too.
(and yet, somehow, I know? You won't.)




wranx
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3 posted 2003-04-29 06:38 AM


Knowing without knowing, and yet.
Sunshine
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4 posted 2003-04-29 06:42 AM



I would say all that Serenity said,
but I won't.

Aenimal
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5 posted 2003-05-01 02:59 PM


Yes its always up before i am..the rooster I mean..grin

nevermind. great stuff bri

wranx
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6 posted 2003-05-02 01:16 PM


And some secrets held dear...

Sprung only when it is time....ah, spring.

littlewing
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7 posted 2003-05-03 12:33 PM


Bri:

you are quite amazing
and this . . .
gave me a breath of fresh air

(yes, the both of you are writers)
Ed and you - *sheesh* lol

loved this
xxoo


brian sites
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8 posted 2003-05-03 12:55 PM


I believe in me
I don't believe in me
I both believe and don't believe in me
I neither believe nor don't believe in me

there
that's better
thank you all for the wonderful replies

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