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MikeFessel
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0 posted 2003-04-29 01:56 AM


I will burn you with fire, exorcise your demons.
Bore a hole through your head to release the evil vapors.
Bleed the sickness from your soul with a barrel of leeches.
Torturing you in countless ways your sins shall be revealed.
Cleansing your blackened soul till you are spotless anew.
Grant you entrance to heavens gate with a slice of my sword.
The memory of your impaled heart living on in a thousand forms.
Then returning home I will forget your very existance.
Dreaming sweet dreams of the righteous.
Awaiting fiery fires of the damned.

   By Michael J Fessel

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-29-2003 02:17 AM).]

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no wonder my sins seem to stick out and bring me guilt...
Powerful write!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

MikeFessel
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2 posted 2003-04-29 03:33 AM


Thank you Alyssa,
LOL I'm glad you felt this was powerful

             Mike

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3 posted 2003-04-29 03:36 AM


whew! wow!

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MikeFessel
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4 posted 2003-04-29 03:43 AM


Well thank you Passing Shadows, I think?

     Mike

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5 posted 2003-04-29 07:58 AM


This is an interesting angle for you! I like it - it's not sad, not happy, but POWERFUL indeed!  I think I'll run on to church now!

See, I knew you could do it, this is GOOD! Variety is the spice of life!   

I just got back from my morning walk, and I wanted to say Good Morning to you!  I watched the world wake up from my front porch, and it was so nice!

This really is powerful - WOW! Very interesting what goes on inside that head of yours...very interesting! Keep it coming!

  ~poetSeaMaiden

~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

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6 posted 2003-04-30 12:20 PM


Pssstt...I wrote a little something you might like - I'm having trouble with the glass thing, so I did this instead. Sorry. Where you been hiding? You better be so involved with another great poem that you just can't QUIT thank you very much. LOL!  I just about died when you used that on me a couple of messages ago. You're too funny!



~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

MikeFessel
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7 posted 2003-04-30 01:11 AM


Re: Everyone:

I hope no one is getting the wrong impression here! This is not an attempt by me to come off as more righteous than anyone else!

This IS an attack on all those who think this way, and a vehement one- see last line! In the last line "Awaiting fiery fires of the damned." -I tried to show that deep inside the "righteous one" knows the true fate that awaits him.

Sorry if my attempt at satire with the title threw anyone for a loop here

    Mike

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-30-2003 01:38 AM).]

MikeFessel
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8 posted 2003-04-30 01:50 AM


poetSeaMaiden,
Oh thank you I edited this again and again trying to add power to this. I'm glad you felt it! And for all the kind compliments
   "I think I'll run on to church now!" LOL I was not trying to imply anything of the sort! This is actually a bit of angst against all those throughout history up to the the present who elevate themselves so much that they condemn others as below them, as unworthy. In the last line "Awaiting fiery fires of the damned." -I tried to show that deep inside, the "righteous one" knows the true fate that awaits him. I don't think anyone got this though. Sigh...this is happening to me too much lately.

Oh Good Morning to you too! You are really sweet. And you sound so happy. Oh it fills me with joy!!! YAY! Sorry, but something about you always makes me want to bounce!

Yes my head is pretty interesting, a real rollercoaster ride, and as always I am in the front seat LOL

Oh you wrote a new poem? YES! I must find it! I am off to find it even as I speak!!!

       Mike

P.S.- Glad I made you laugh, least I can do for someone as incredible as you!

      


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9 posted 2003-04-30 08:14 AM


Okay okay, now with a little explanation, I do SEE that! Sorry, but me little brain was still hung up and scared from that first line of exorcising demons and all, I think I got nervous and didn't catch the rest of what I was reading!  I do see it now, because of your line that says they return home and are all jolly and all. WOW, now that I know what the real meaning is, this REALLY punches, and I know a few people I could send this to!!  LOL!  Just kidding...I wouldn't be so mean. A VERY interesting view, sir! BRAVO!

And pssstt...don't worry if none of us got it, this was pretty deep and from a very intriguing angle!  It just goes to show just how deeply you think! That's GOOD!   More rollercoaster, MORE rollercoaster!  I'm liking the ride!!  ( I'm in the seat right behind you btw. )

~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

MikeFessel
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10 posted 2003-04-30 08:28 AM


PoetSeaMaiden,
   You always seem to know just what to say! Not too bad for someone with such a little brain   If you have a little brain, my goodness, mine must be nonexistant! I feel much better about this now, thank you.

LOL I can promise you more rollercoaster, that's for sure, can't help that. Oh and I am so touched that you choose to continue to ride! Still, if it ever gets too rough for you, I will understand.

     Mike  

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-30-2003 08:29 AM).]

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11 posted 2003-04-30 09:07 AM


Oh no, I'm not getting off this thing for nothing!  I paid GOOD money to ride, although I'll warn you, I've been known to toss my cookies from time to time, so DUCK!
MikeFessel
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12 posted 2003-04-30 09:12 AM


PoetSeaMaiden,
LOL I take it that means you forgive me?

     Thank you!
                 Mike

poetSeaMaiden
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13 posted 2003-04-30 09:55 AM


Well GOOD MORNING Mr. Fessel, how are YOU today?   (Still griping my chest!) LOL!

Well hell, I had written you a long funny note on your other post, and it went POOF when I went to edit my smilies!  I'm so mad, I can't even remember what all it said, so darnit anyway!

It was SO long, and it was SO funny! *kick* *kick* Pardon me for another moment while I pout. *sigh*  Okay, I'm done.

Well, I guess as I remember things I said, I'll tell 'em to you, ok?  I think I mainly wanted to apologize for taking that personally, I'm sorry I freaked you out for a minute. But hey, I was freaking out too! LOL! You used a couple of lines in there that I thought were from me, and I said,"OH crap, this guy hates me now!"  I went back and checked the times that the posts were left trying to figure out where you went AWOL on me at. I came in first, and read your happy thoughts on my poem, and then I got so excited to see you post something new, and when I went in to read it - I felt SO BAD. I was *wringing my hands* hoping I hadn't hurt you in anyway. *wringing hands more!* I didn't know what to do, or even what to say. I thought you were mad at me for kidding around with you or something. ??  I had no idea...I'm so sorry!

I'll be sure and wear my jock strap next time I go in to read your stuff, ok? LOL! I don't have THOSE parts, silly!  I KNOW what you're thinking!   (Counting smilies as I go!) Don't want to overdo it!!!!!!!

Anyway, I'm sorry you felt that way last night. I don't like seeing people hurting. I guess I'm like a Miss Fix It or something. I go around trying to help all the time, and sometimes I may overstep my boundaries, and I don't mean to. I don't ever want to hurt you, I hope you know that. I'm just trying to be a friend, and you make me laugh too, so it's all good! LOL! Thanks for being a friend.

I don't know what you've gone through, but the wounds seem pretty fresh. Are you sure you're going to be ok?  Time does wonders for pain, but the scars never do go away. I have a few myself. Hell, I look like I've been through the darn war or something! LOL  Not literally of course, but my heart. Been chewed up and spit out before a few times myself. It gets old. But it makes me stronger, and it makes me wiser, and I always seem to survive and move on to better things. It gives us character!   If nothing else, we can thank the people who hurt us most, because they make us who we are - BETTER people, stronger people. I'm sorry, somehow I got off preaching there. I'll be quiet.

Um... if I've been counting correctly, I've used up my smilies already, so I'll let you go for now with a BIG SQUEEZE like that, ok?  hee hee! I hope you have an insanely GREAT day Mr.Fessel! *dumping buckets of HAPPY on you!!*  

~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

MikeFessel
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14 posted 2003-04-30 11:01 AM


Dear PoetSeaMaiden,
Oh how could you ever think anyone could be upset with you? Between all your kindness, the terrific personality that shines through in all your responses, your sense of humor, and your beautiful, soul touching poetry, how could anyone not think the world of you. Sigh...you are so incredible

"Pardon me for another moment while I pout." -He he for some reason this just made me giggle.

Don't apologize to me! I am accepting all the blame here, for I am sure that I deserve it. I am so mad at myself for making you friek that I actually did that to teach myself a lesson No I don't see how I could ever be mad at you for any reason. There's no way you could ever do anything to upset me could you? No I know you couldn't!

"I was wringing my hands" -oh you wouldn't believe how bad I feel right now

"I don't have THOSE parts, silly!  I KNOW what you're thinking!" -LOL I know that, thank you very much mermaiden.

You didn't overstep your boundaries at all! How touched I am that you worry about me, you should only know. You are a wonderful friend. And so funny. You make me laugh constantly throughout your replies. Thank you for that! You must think I'm insane, being nice to you and than writing the poetry I do, but most of the time its not like you read in my poetry, its just when I'm all alone, well sometimes its more than I can handle. You must be able to understand that, maybe, yes?

     Mike


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15 posted 2003-04-30 11:03 AM


Oh and its Ok I am fine. I just go through this stuff for a little while and then I can laugh and smile again. The poetry helps me let this all out, and that's why its always so emotional. And feel free to preach! I found your words to be very wise indeed, though I can never thank those who hurt me, just forgive them. Which I always do, I can never hold a grudge, and I can surely never hate!

Oh but to hear about your scars I wish I could take them from your soul and add them to my own. I have plenty, and I would willingly take a few more to make your heart free.

Thanks for the buckets of happy! I felt them kicking in from the instant I read you were dumping them onto me!!!

  BIG HUGS BACK! Mike  

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16 posted 2003-04-30 11:47 AM


Good Morning Mr. Fessel!  I just wrote something FOR you! I wrote it from MY experience, but I'm sure you can relate - as we probably have some of the same boo-boos. (handing you a Band-Aid while I slap one on myself.) Here, let me do it. (slapping it on you!)

You have to try and find some light in these things we go through. There's a reason for everything, I always believe. A toast to our survival! *clink*  

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17 posted 2003-04-30 11:53 AM


*big sighs* You know what Mr.Fessel?  You're so darn sweet, I'm gonna start calling you SWEET & LOW.

THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU - I really prefer the little blue packets though, just between you and me. It's called EQUAL.

MikeFessel
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18 posted 2003-04-30 04:54 PM


PoetSeaMaiden,
I think you have me on the mind today, don't you? I guess your on mine today too, cause I came back here to look for you! Thanks for the Band-Aid, oh and I thought they were just for covering wounds, but your brand seems to help them to heal as well  

LOL Sweet And Low, oh I like that, you are so clever! As for Equal, hmmm I don't even know how it tastes. But I admit I would like to try it sometime.

       Mike

P.S.- Oh and you don't have to call me Mr. Fessel all the time, I mean you can if you  want, but it makes me feel so old, and I sure hope 24 isn't old to you! Mike is what most people call me, and I guess its okay [shrugs] Anyway, this isn't that important, call me whatever you'd prefer  

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-30-2003 04:54 PM).]

poetSeaMaiden
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19 posted 2003-05-01 10:58 AM


Sorry about calling you Mister, I just think it sounds um...steamy! LOL!

I can understand though that it may sound "old" and you ARE a few years younger than me - just a FEW I say!

Anyway, I want you to have a good day today. You are a good person and you KNOW that, and so do I. Please be happy, ok?   ~ Gennifer

~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see.  ~ PoetSeaMaiden

MikeFessel
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20 posted 2003-05-01 04:36 PM


Dear Gennifer,
Oh thats your name I always liked the name Jennifer, but I've never seen it spelled with a G. I really like it though. Gennifer is much better!

Sounds steamy, huh? I certainly like that, so in that case by all means continue LOL No I'm just kidding, call me whatever you'd like.

oh and forget the age thing. I am just stupid sometimes. I don't really care about age at all, except my own. Although now you are sounding defensive: "You ARE a few years younger than me - just a FEW I say!" -Ha ha ha, I'm sure its just a few, I'll take your word for it

Oh and thank you sweetheart! I AM having a good day! Yikes, I hadn't slept for about 40 hours before last night [I do that too often lately!] and I was so sure I was going to wake up this morning all depressed. [I know myself too well I guess] But I don't, I feel good! I think I am getting better. I hope so...

  More hugs for you!
      Mike

P.S.- You'd better be having a good day too!

[This message has been edited by MikeFessel (05-01-2003 04:36 PM).]

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21 posted 2003-05-02 10:03 AM


Good Morning Mr. Fessel  

I'm so glad you're feeling better - I'm sitting here freakin' COLD, and shivering! It's gray and rainy outside, and I'm freezing my muffins off because of it! LOL!

I hope you're finding something to write about - you could write about mermaids!

I'm 30, just so you know - I've gracefully reached that "old lady" phase. Once you leave your 20's, no one wants you because you're so old, and you are BOUND to have too much baggage and bitterness! LOL! You should really consider getting some sleep so you can function properly! Of course a young strapping man like yourself - heck, who needs sleep right? You're still in that SUPERMAN phase. How ARE you doing, anyway?

Well, pick that pen up and SHOCK me, will ya? (Putting jock strap on and helmet, kneepads & goggles!)

MikeFessel
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22 posted 2003-05-02 08:13 PM


Gennifer,
He he Good Day to you SeaMaiden [sorry I am just in a laughing type of mood],

LOL Oh my, freezing in the cold? I don't know where you live, but here in NYC its nice and warm. Na na na! Just kidding. You are going to get sick doing stuff like that. Please be careful K?

"I hope you're finding something to write about - you could write about mermaids!" -Hmmm...I have been writing something, but about what? Well you will just have to wait and see! LOL

30, old? HA HA Yeah right. Best joke you've made yet I will be there soon enough myself, so I don't even want to here that...Oh and don't say that stuff about yourself. There is no chance that is true, especially in your case I am sure. Heck 30 is the start of your prime. Name one top actress who is under thirty. There aren't many, Yet there are tons who are easily over. Why do you think that is? Huh?

As for baggage, posh, we all have plenty. If baggage stopped anyone from hooking up, we'd all be single. Its the baggage that reminds us of how much stronger our hardships have made us. Hmmm...didn't someone I know tell me something just like that recently?

Sleep, sigh...yes I know. And there's no Superman here, just a guy sitting up all alone lost in his thoughts. I just have trouble sleeping some times. Its so dark, and quiet, and all my thoughts start chasing each other in my mind, and well sleep just doesn't come to me at times like that, you know? I am doing fine by the way, not as good as yesterday, but better than the day before and compared to tomorrow who knows?

Continued below, cause I am so wordy!              

MikeFessel
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23 posted 2003-05-02 08:15 PM


continuation

I have plenty of shock left in this pen don't you worry about that! I have 3 poems which I am stuck on, but I am going to take a look at them now and see if I can't get them finished. I've written more, but you won't be seeing them here anytime soon, this site is likely to censore me again, so I dare not post them here.

I loved hearing from you again, and this was so much fun to read! But maybe this would be more apropriate sent to me as oh, I don't know...an EMail? [Grin!] If you would like to EMail me, you can at michael_fessel@yahoo.com  No pressure, and don't worry if you don't want to, I promise this is the last time I will bring it up, won't be mentioning it again.

Thanks for thinking of me once more. A reply from you always brings the biggest of smiles to my face! [BIG SMILES]
    Hugs!
    Mike


MikeFessel
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24 posted 2003-05-03 06:00 AM


Gennifer,
Hope you look in here again, otherwise these lasts posts are a waste of time. I am working on a new poem, putting more work into it than any before. I actually threw out the whole thing and started fresh, and now I am pretty deep in, but well this one is very mentally draining and I can only write it in spurts. Just in case you are wondering why I am taking a while to post. I hope when I finally do you will like it

Sorry about the lack of smilies, but I am so very tired.

   Mike

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25 posted 2003-05-03 10:26 AM


Mike, you do sound tired - I hope you're sleeping. I haven't been able to drop in here near as much as I'd like, things are so hectic here at home. Lots of projects going on that keep me away. I'm sorry, and none of your posts are ever a waste, ok? You always put so much into them, and I promise, they do get read.

I would really like to email you, but I don't have the balls, in all honesty. I promised myself when I came back to this site after being gone for over 3 years, that I would lay low, remain anonymous, and behave myself. LOL!  Well, it's hard, but I'm trying. I used to be VERY well known and well liked in here, hell, I was a Moderator, can you believe that?  Yep, and now, I just want to write and read and share a bit from time to time. Maybe be a friend when I can, and help when I can. It's definately different - I'm so used to being "out there" and little Miss Popularity in here, you know? It's like no one knows me now, and that's good.   I like it that way - too much drama the other way. This place is awesome, but it can fast become like a soap opera if you aren't careful. People judge, people fight, people take sides and gang up - it's sad. That's why I left the first time. Anyway, I hope you understand, and if it's ok for now, we can just keep talking in our replies?  I hope you don't take that personally, believe you me, it's not you at all. You always make me smile! I just don't want to hurt anyone, you know? It's such a long story, you have no idea. I might get brave one day soon and email you with the whole story in detail so you'll know what I'm talking about here. Until then, trust me that it's NOT you. Keep smiling Mike, and rest - you sound so exhausted. I'll hold your head while you dream. And oh, you HAVE to turn those thougths OFF in your head, otherwise you'll NEVER go to sleep!

Big hugs to you

~ your SeaMaiden

MikeFessel
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26 posted 2003-05-05 04:26 PM


Oh i wrote a reply to this days back but its gone! I feel like crap right now so i cant repost right now, but i wrote you replies to Disinterested too then, and they are still there so you could read them while i try to work out a serious personal problem. number 1 problem of my life sigh

     Mike

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27 posted 2003-05-15 06:24 AM


PoetSeaMaiden,
Guess you got tired of the rollercoaster ride huh Gennifer?

I don't blame you for everyone does sooner or later. Tis the story of my life.

     Bye!
     Mike

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