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On A Midnight Bench In Manhattan
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On A Midnight Bench In Manhattan |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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How long has it been since you died in my arms, how long since your warmth filled my soul? Why is it now that we're real worlds apart, I still feel you by me when I'm all alone? Why in a crowd do I see your small form moving quickly like smoke through a screen; how do you borrow the face of a stranger just to smile at me through her eyes? How does my sense for you stay so alive that I still hear you laugh in my dreams? why are these tears in my eyes as I write, it's thirty-five years that you're gone. ©2003 by icebox |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. But it is an awesome poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
years don't wash away such pains as those. You write from someplace deeper than many..and find the words well to give birth to the feelings and expressions... excellent work...as is all I have read by you. My compliments to the Poet... my understanding for the feelings. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
icebox Good thoughts, good write, good read. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox I know this feeling so well.... Thank you for expressing it! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent expression...I find myself looking for special one's to me in a mall...I glance and think, oh that's her, and its not. James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
That's a deep inner heart pain that will never go away, but would you really want it to? I think not. She remains a vital beating piece of your heart. I hope she knew that in her heart before leaving this world. |
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22NICK22 Member
since 2003-05-29
Posts 54 |
YOU ARE OF THE FINEST POETS I'VE YET TO READ |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Mr. Icebox, This is so beautiful and sorrowful at once. The tears are falling from my eyes. "Why in a crowd do I see your small form moving quickly like smoke through a screen? How do you borrow the face of a stranger just to smile at me through her eyes?" I am speechless. Patricia |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Why in a crowd do I see your small form moving quickly like smoke through a screen; how do you borrow the face of a stranger just to smile at me through her eyes?' If I agree to grow up, can I write like this?  I'm really glad you found your way to these pages. Enjoyed...as always. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very touching sad piece, its possible because our loved ones no matter how long they have passed are around us all the time everyday, everysecond watching over us. Love doesnt die with death. Wonderful writing thankyou for sharing  Julie "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
sounds like you know the depth of "true love". well done |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
the_loner_23 ~ Thank you for reading my poem and for taking time to comment. Cpat Hair ~ Your comments are a great kindness. Thank you. Seymour Tabin ~ Good way to put it. *smile* Thank you for reading my poem. Martie ~ Yes, my friend, I know you do. You are welcome. James Michael ~ *smile* That part never ceases to amaze me. I would swear that it is coming into my eyes from the outside and not just something my mind imagines. Thank you for reading and for your comments. Midnitesun ~ What you say is true; we are the sum of our parts, our life experience mixed with whatever understandings we can manage. I will not know in this life if she knew; I hope so. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comments. 22NICK22 ~ I do not know whether I should thank you, or suggest that you read more poets, or ask someone to bring you a cold drink. *grin* Your's is a very generous statement. Thank you and thank you for reading my poem. Patricia ~ I hope by now your tears have dried and that you feel better. *smile* Thank you for reading this and for your comment. Duncan ~ Gee, I don't know; I bet you can. Are you sure you want to? *smile* You can thank (or blame) BluesSerenade for me being here. She gave me a great gift by suggesting that I visit this place. Thank you for your comments. whiskey ~ Yes, I think that love does not die with death. It dies from starvation and it dies from betrayal but it does not perish from death itself. Thank you for reading this and for taking time to comment. Edder ~ I do not know really, I just try to understand. Thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
" How does my sense for you stay so alive that I still hear you laugh in my dreams?" damn...you yanked those tears right out from my heart here....  You write so powerfully |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
SEA ~ Thank you for reading my poems and for your comment. passing shadows ~ Thank you for reading my poem, I am sorry to have brought you tears. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautifully painful.... Susan C. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Susan Caldwell ~ Thank you for reading and for taking time to comment. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, very beautifully painful |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Passionately deep and intense within....Nice work! |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
passing shadows ~ Thank you for sopping by to read this and for taking such early morning time to comment. ethome ~ Thank you for reading my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I don't think real love dies at all... it stays in touch by its memories. M |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yes, and in some ways it is stronger, but in other ways it is a pale aching shadow of itself. Thank you for reading and for your comment. |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
Not time or distance or even dead can diminish true love.To have such memorys is a great treasure. paladin |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
A very beautiful and touching write. I enjoyed this very much. |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
paladin ~ Yes, memory is a treasure. I have come to understand that I have led a charmed life. It took me too long to learn that. Eloise ~ Thank you for reading my poem; I am glad you enjoyed it. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ice: mannn . . . got me good with this one too many ghosts . . . beautiful writing and here's a tissue for you . . . xxoo |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
littlewing ~ Sorry, I did not mean to disturb you. Thank you for reading my poem and for taking time to comment. |
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