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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
I dream mirrors in the dark no reflection one spark interrupting night not much it lives on bouncing two mirrors reflecting ambivalent light behold the beam passing between intensity grows aura overwhelming night made bright glass now aglow radiance daylight fades before burning rays oh how I dream of mirrors parallel and one spark just one spark By Michael Fessel Sorry, I know this is lousy, but I am new to writing anything but the darkest expressions  [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-28-2003 05:10 AM).] |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Oh nope - this is NOT lousy...this is...radiant!  I read this twice over, so I could really see what was happening here. Beautiful, beautiful! See, you can do it! I like how you ended it too, repeating yourself to REALLY make that point.  It may seem as if some of us are encouraging you to be happy, but it's just because we like to see you smile - and don't be afraid to post the darker, sad stuff, because you know we'll all be here to hug.  Keep in mind, we are all poets, and poets above all, have INTENSE emotions - both sides - which is why we are so unique and GREAT at expressing them. It's an art, and one you should be proud of.  I owe you BIG for teaching me where to find the smilies! If they were snakes, they would have been ALL OVER ME! Can't wait to see more of your work! You best get busy, because we're awaiting!  ~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see. ~ PoetSeaMaiden |
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Mary Ann Member
since 2003-04-23
Posts 111 |
I like your poem a lot ... it has a good ryhthm and intriguing subject matter.. God bless, Mary Ann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mike, this poem is definitely not "lousy"! In fact, I found it rather fascinating!  Love & Light, EA |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Okay, I know I've already replied to this, but can you believe that I actually thought of writing something like this last night? I had the idea of a pane of glass, and two people, one on each side - separated. It was to be like a forelorn, two lover's lost or separated sort of thing. Your idea here made me think of the same thing when I read it, although I know it's somewhat along a different line, but you know what I mean. ( I hope! ) I sound like I'm rambling. Sorry.  Your two mirrors with a reflection made it seem similar somehow. Don't ask me, I've lost myself now!  If you find me, let me know, ok? I'll shut up now. LOL![This message has been edited by poetSeaMaiden (04-28-2003 09:24 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
very nice! good reflective writing |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Mike, "aura overwhelming night made bright glass now aglow radiance" And there you have it. Absolutely beautiful! The radiance of you in beautiful words full of light and hope that are now seeping from your soul. I got your e-mail this morning. We are going through the same thing, my friend. We are both on the same journey to becoming us, the us we should have been. That is why all of this is so familiar to me. I had a head start on the extroversion you spoke of in your e-mail. I am a couple of steps ahead of you with this. I guess I felt the connection because I have passed through this place on my journey. Your words are a reminder of whence I came. I am not there yet, but thank God I am not where I was. God Bless You, Patricia |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is really good and unique.... Hope all is well. No, not lousy at all!!!! I very much enjoyed this... Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Dear PoetSeaMaiden, And I thought I loved smilies. But I only knew how to help because KoKo helped me first to find them, so you should really be thanking her instead. "If they were snakes, they would have been ALL OVER ME!" -LOL oh this had me rolling  see? I'm happy you are having so much fun with them!And thank you for the compliments! I wanted to fill this out, but I had struggled with it so much already, I didn't have the mental strength. So that is why it is so bareboned, unfortunately oh, you make me smile everytime I read one of your posts. Plus I am smiling so much more lately, you wouldn't believe it! So try not to worry, even when I do post more of my dark stuff K?"Poets above all, have INTENSE emotions - both sides - which is why we are so unique and GREAT at expressing them. It's an art, and one you should be proud of." -I know you are such a talented poet, but me, a poet? I can't fathom being called one, but thank you! Oh I think that is so cool, the similar ideas. Yes I do see what you meen, though yours would have been sadder, still wow, highly coincidental. I guess we were on similar wavelengths last night! Oh and you should really write that poem, I would love to read that! oh and please ramble at will, I love it! So much fun to read your replies when you do. I could sit back and listen for hours Mike More hugs for you! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
MaryAnn, I am so happy you enjoyed this. Thanks for the kind words! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Yay! Earth Angel, I am so glad you thought so. I was not expecting any positive feedback for this, so thank you so much!!! Oh and I love the smilie. So thoughtful! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Midnitesun, A thumbs up from you means SO much to me. Oh, I feel so good Thank you! Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Patricia, Oh your kinds words move me everytime. thank you! Glad you received my E-Mail Wow, same journey! I am glad to see that things look continue to brighten down the road. Oh I wish you happiness in the future. And I know you will obtain it! You are in my prayers sweet soul, Mike |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh all is looking up Bridgette thankyou. So great to hear from you again! Glad you liked this [and thanks for the wave] Right back at you!I really hope you are feeling great as well. Mike P.S.- I love your beautiful quote. Oh that it could be so! |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Yay! Thank you Verdana! Mike |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
WHAT? You can write pieces like this and you don't consider yourself a poet? Well heck Mr. Fessel, where do you think you GET this stuff? Yup, he's a poet, and didn't know it.  Would you REALLY listen to me for hours? *sigh* You can send me a bill if you need to, you are NICE, yes you are!! I bet you'd start looking like this after about 30 minutes or so.  hee hee!You know, I think I just might attempt that "glass pane" poem tonight, since you've encouraged me to do so. We'll see how it turns out. It's a different angle for me, so you know how that goes.  ~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see. ~ PoetSeaMaiden |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Oh PoetSeaMaiden graces me with her presence again I don't like to be called a poet. Whenever I look at my work, I can see a million flaws and weaknesses that I don't have the ability to repair. I am yet to write a poem where I was even close to happy with the results. [shrugs] Doubt I ever will. Yes, I would listen to you for hours and enjoy it I am sure And I would NOT look like that thank you very much! LOL Yay! I hope you do write the "glass pane" poem! I bet it will turn out great. Yup I am sure of it. Can't wait! Mike [This message has been edited by MikeFessel (04-28-2003 08:06 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Not lousy....it has great atmosphere that carries from the first line to the last, solid imagery, and it's written on an inventive topic.... Not lousy at all..... Poetry is a lot like other arts, particularly painting. When you first start to paint everything you paint will be dark. Eventually you find the light, but you have to show the darkness first. Getting brighter is a sign of growth. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Thank you Ratleader Mike |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hey, I liked it so it's not lousy |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
Passing Shadows, Hmmm your opinion is good enough for me, I guess this must be good Seriously, I value you're opinion very much, and I am so glad you liked this. Why a hug? I don't know. Just felt like it. There doesn't always have to be a reason, does there? Mike |
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