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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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A re-write of an oldie formerly titled "Martyr".... Hope When he smiles, it's of the sunrise and, he needs no piper's music to make children follow. I was drawn, like all the others by a magnetism I cannot describe. He understood, broke down the barriers and encouraged the impossible, most of all, he was friend. I cannot say how to hold him, for, even now, palms are plain, though I've strived to find that happiness, that boundless, beautiful dream, the kind that gulps the air with eyes closed and believes in the unseen. I used to roll the moon's eye in my hand with larger than life wings, outstretched; I used to taste the sweet purity, the restless play and guise of youth knitting his voice into my skin, wool soft with fantasy, finger-stitched in quilted warmth upon my heart with satin sounds of wedding gown and princely kiss. You can nod your head in appreciation in that long forgotten sigh of sympathy and reclaimed innocence, but, you cannot possibly delve into my dimensions, into my common, though solitary childhood croquis. You might say that 'he' is everything and nothing all at once to a child, beguiled and wild; that 'he' only exists when faith and imagination twine, but, then comes the passing of time, of little girl lost, of 'he' - the hope. The moon weaves his wrinkled scar laughter in abandonment across my broken brow, I walk against the wind, the rebel, throwing caution with a frozen tear. I am inept, survivor, seeker, martyr, caging passion in delusion, fighting my own plight in crippled cocoon that could still fly a miracle, a bargain of fate. Where is that fervor? Where is the love that I have longed to find? The Friendly Giant, Hercules, Mr. Dressup - they're all gone, so is Superman. And I'll never know the knowing of where I'm going because fairytales are too promising, reality unkind, and, I still haven't learned how to say goodbye, to let 'him' go, though the funeral is tomorrow. By Melissa P. Long-Monette [This message has been edited by Honeybee (04-26-2003 11:45 PM).] |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Splendid... do you still have the original, I'd like to see it! (¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh! Twists my heart..... what an excellent poem....and the ending -- rhymes with rending! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic Melissa!! I am speechless... powerful, and what an ending! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Melissa this is just..I could try to find the words but they seem hollow can I just leave it at I loved this? Mr. Dressup yes no doubt you are Canadian lol Casey to this day still gives me the creeps |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Can I just say that I wish I could write like this?  Loving your work as usual. You could hurt me with your bare hands. You could hurt me using the sharp edge of what you say. JEWEL |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You are a marvelous poetess, honeybee! This tugs so hard and so beautifully. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is utterly amazing I was drawn, like all the others by a magnetism I cannot describe. He understood, broke down the barriers and encouraged the impossible, most of all, he was friend. You are brilliant Melissa truly great purge xxoo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Honeybee Don't know how I missed this. A wonderful rewrite, with wonderful lines. I am always impressed with your writing.  |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Honeybee....Extremely gorgeous poem written with immense skill. Your imagery is just exquisite. BRAVO!!! You captured my emotions with this beautiful poem. ***Ivy Rose |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Malissa...Amazing depth of thought in this...captured me completely. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Melissa, this is as always, special. (I like your photo, too) Sandra |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow. An amazing write, Melissa Honeybee. so good to read your words again. You were one of my favorites when I first joined this board. Always offering unique, beautiful imagery. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Potently powerful, patootie Your writing has the ability to hit like a hammer while feeling soft as silk...this is one. I can't help you out with Superman but Mr. Magoo is here available...  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is outstandingly beautiful. So glad I got to read it. Touches deeply. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Fairy tales are very promising indeed, but certainly knowing that they come straight out of manys imaginations and the imagination is a real thing, that must mean some fairy tales somehow can live and come true in our own surroundings! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, delay the funeral and embrace the possibilities again, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Your replies mean so much to me and I thank you all for taking the time out to not only read my poetry but to reply with such encouragement and depth. This has always been one of my favourites and perhaps I'll post it for the next book???! Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
I think you should DEFINITLY choose this for the book. I can't...damn. I'm just...stunned. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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Mary Ann Member
since 2003-04-23
Posts 111 |
This is a beautiful poem Your perception and sensitivity throughout is moving and draws the reader in.... thank you for the wonderful read .. God bless, Mary Ann |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Melissa, by the replies that you have received for this magnificently fine piece of writing!!!---you must realize how much your poetry is admired and appreciated! --and remember, Dear One, there is always "hope"... ~ May a gallant and worthy prince sweep you up upon his steed and carry you off to his castle in a perfect world... Warm hugs, Linda |
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A. L. Becker Member
since 2002-09-06
Posts 167San Francisco, California |
Gosh Melissa, what can i add to what has already been said. it's delicious!!! annie! "Oh, do not ask, 'What is it?' |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, post it for the next book! It's a sure hit! |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Honeybee, this was a great write, so full of expression, childhoods dreams, to days reality, you have given so many feelings here that I am overwelmed, thoughts, questions, past, today, the ponderings on reflection. Very much enjoyed, thank you. Sincerely Rick |
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