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Milk of Paradise
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Milk of Paradise |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Silken pure pleasure dome white as ice and just as pure she lies . . . unconquered and forbidden The sweet fruit upon my lips mingled with heaven I hear in the distance mystical tune Damsel and dulcimer beneath ancestral cries prophesying war Within this cavern volcanic tomb wailing throughout I stir and shout . . . "Beware!" Stifled symphony revive within me For I cannot breathe nor leave The sight this vision of horror I plea . . . "Strike me blind!" Eyes of blackness utter madness Fire above him and fire within She cries the cure around him thrice Weave a circle neat and nice For hearts own tune became her bread Demon lover he hath fed "Close your eyes, Beware! Beware!" the circle thrice woven 'round The icy white of Paradise (dedicated to Samuel Taylor Coleridge) |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
a beautiful write   "more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you" |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Tis nearly time to dance around the "Beltain", to pass through the needfire toward the cleansing. This milk? Ambrosia. [This message has been edited by wranx (04-27-2003 08:13 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Exquisite!!... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Wow, speechless for once...must talk |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
amazing - you always impress me the multiple imagery - well written and what a story - a pure beauty - a demon - her struggle to defend herself thwarted by her own desire - & sooo much more your version of this classic is astounding |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh my gosh, I read his poetry too, he is simply amazing and with the way you write you are bound to become one of the next great poets, that I have faith in you! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful! Eric |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wonderfully written.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Powerful! Love this...adding to my library  Maree. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, this is a very powerful write. You can write poetry on any subject and do it wonderfully. Hugs, Ethel |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're writing is intense, and I'm in awe of your momentum! This is one of your best, tweets~ |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
excellant |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
whoa! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Wings - Nancy & James: thank you so very much - was a toughie to do Ed: I swear I wrote this before I read about the that . . . too good to me dream: you know this? amazing . . . thank you - I am impressed Raph: I have performed a miracle then if you are speechless - hehe thank you sincerely - from you to be speechless means a lot to me xxoo Ericc & scorpio - thank you so very much - took a lot to do this one Noah: always so good to me - dont know about the poet thing but I do write from my heart . . . you are so sweet thank you Maree: wow - I am humbled thank you Ethel: you think so? I try to be diversified - you just made me smile thank you Brad - an excellent - very cool thank you Dixie - hehehe - whoa horsey . . . thank you Bluesy (what is your name sis huh? lol) (tweets - hehe smiled again) momentum - awesome - that is what I try to do - thank you so much Thanks guys xxoo |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok I came back to explain this one a bit if you dont mind seems a bit confusing: Kubla Khan was a 13th century emperor in Xanadu, a city in China. I compare the land and war to the damsel and her demon lover. The cave of ice is a cavern created by volcanic eruption where the demon lover meets the damsel. I am observing. The lover captures the damsel just when the cries of war are heard above - on land - below in caves of ice the demon appears - fiery red hair and evil within - the circle thrice is to ward him off - to encapsulate him - failing - he drinks of paradise. The circle weaved then to prevent further destruction. In the original by Coleridge - this was a vision he had and wrote about it - is much more detailed - this is just a glimpse of it - a most amazing write in itself - he referred to the end result as: "For he on honeydew hath fed and drank the milk of Pardise" (Rush does a great tribute to this on their "Farewell to Kings" album) Ok I'm done . . . thank you everyone xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-27-2003 06:08 AM).] |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
people may find your explanation intresting so heres a bump for 1 of my favorite writers |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
Well, you certainly inspired me to research this poem a little and to read Samuel Taylor Coleridge's poem entitled Kubla Khan which was strangely inspired according to the author by the diaries of Samuel Purchas and a bit of Opium prescribed for medical reasons. (Smiles) I too had some vivid visions when I was under morphine for medical purposes, but unfortunately, similar to Coleridge, I have forgotten most of them because I did not write them down before the images were lost by distractions. (I guess this is a lesson still to be learned by even us poets today) Anyway, I think that you did give the above mentioned poem much justice here and I most enjoyed the personal challenge to look a bit deeper into your source. Good job my poet friend. -Bob |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I pretty much am left with Dixie's reply only I would add a DAMN! to it this is GREAT!.... more o dis? please? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
thanks dream *wink* Bob: wow - you amazed me with your research here - thank you - had no idea it was a opium induced vision - explains a whole lot lol - thank you - I have always admired this write and really attempted to grasp its true meaning . . . Bri: hehehe more o dis? I have no idea where dis came from . . . thank you xxoo |
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