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Like a child
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Like a child |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk 
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like a child go wild, like a child, hide and giggle til it hurts, run so fast the wind can't catch you, and eat pudding til you burst. make daisy chains in the field, see dragon clouds in the sky, crush rose petals to make fairy juice, and serve teddy bears mud pies. like a child catch the moment, wring the happiness from each day, dont worry if you graze a knee, the pain will be kissed away the grown up world can wait a while, there's nothing there to envy, be a child as often as you can, and the world won't get so heavy. [This message has been edited by junemac (04-25-2003 10:30 AM).] |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
 I really enjoyed this poem... but you forgot to check the little box thingy that indicates that you want to submit this to Reflections... Please do so ..... I will check back and vote once it is done.... You have 24 hours to edit your work in this forum... just click on the little icon third from the left to get back into your edit code..... Get going... the book is almost finished... and I would like to see this one in there!!!!! Sherry   Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. [This message has been edited by Magicmystery (04-24-2003 09:48 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
When you're checking go back and put apostrophes in can't and won't and in another place you have a comma instead of an apostrophe. I will vote for it, but we want it perfect for the book. Love, Joyce |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice, a good reminder for us all |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
I love it! When I was reading it, I could feel the wind in my face from a game of tag, and the little laughs harvested from a wild field of joy... If only we could "wring the happiness" out of each day more often, I'm sure we could see past all the troubles in life. ~El Campeador “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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junemac Senior Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 1005uk |
thank you all for the comments you have made about my first poem. i have taken them on board and i think i have edited them ( although on screen at the moment it looks just the same ) i am struggling with getting used to this site but i am sure i will eventually get there. please let me know if i have done everything right. thanks you lovely people. xxxx june xxxx |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very nice write, "It matters not how you answer, It matters only if i hear you" |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Ooooohhh, I really like this! "Crush rose petals to make fairy juice..." It's lines like this that make this "magical!" You have a wonderful way with words, and this is so very good! I will definately be looking for more from you.  And this has SUCH a good message too, a very nice reminder to all of us who are "in the fast lane" of life! Good job!!! |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Crushing petals to make fairy juice...BEAUTIFUL!!!! Welcome to passions!!!! What a GREAT addition to our little family here!!!!! You DEFINITLY have my vote!!! I really, really loved this. You brought me back into my childhood. Thank you so much for this. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ok, nice one! |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I'm back to be sure I voted. Joyce |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
can I vote more than once for this? Like a child, I want MORE, MORE, MORE! I really enjoyed this write, junemac |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions enjoyed |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
the grown up world can wait a while, there's nothing there to envy, be a child as often as you can, and the world won't get so heavy. Right now, at this point in time, I really empathise with the feelings in this phrase. The world IS such a dead weight on one's shoulders. Thanks, June. For sharing such a lovely poem. I'm voting for it, AND adding it into my library. WELCOME TO PASSIONS!  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
You know why I loved this so much? Because I love to act silly, run, play and just have fun! My kids often think I am nuts but I don't care. There was a time I let things get to me...and I suffered for it...one thing at a time..and it always gets better. I loved your poem and welcome to passions!!! Susan C. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
June~ You been following me around ?  Well ... don't forget splish-splashing in freshly fallen rain puddles ! LOVE IT~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear june, this is so lovely and such wise advice! I often forget my age and just enjoy life with a child's heart. (Some bruises happen too!) Love, Margherita |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
June~ I KNOW you'll be peeking in ... now just LOOK WHAT I FOUND !!! Your very FIRST POST here~ It will be SO GOOD having you come 'home'~ Love n' *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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