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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2003-04-25 07:23 AM


I’ll Wait

The local dream express, has flown
And now I wait the waiting zone
I rarely miss this flight of seem
I always ride fist class in dream.

But something happened on the way
It hampered me a moment’s stay
Just enough to turn my head
And sprinkle it a reason’s dread.

It was the clouds in angry pass
Like gray and shifting chutney glass
Stirring up an ill will chill
That gave my mind a spirits rill.

It slowed my muse and drift of night
I could not catch the midnight flight
And lay there in a restless wait
A colored amber thinking state

This moment chalked a spirits wave
A ghost had walked across my grave.


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Tim
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1 posted 2003-04-25 08:20 AM


As always, an enjoyable and pleasant read sprinkled with a bit of smarts to make one think.
Enchantress
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2 posted 2003-04-25 08:52 AM


Sounds as though you didn't sleep well last night Sy.
That closing couplet gave me chills..
How 'bout some Chai tea this morn?
That will cheer you up!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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3 posted 2003-04-25 09:25 AM


Seymour, to-night you and your muse shall have a peaceful sleep. I had a terrible dream last night of spiders!! Big ones! I would rather have a dreamless sleep than one which frightens me. I think we need some comfort food to-day....ummm....how about some warm banana muffins with Enchantress's tea? Okie Dokie. Keep smilin' hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2003-04-25 09:37 AM


Mr. T., next time you have a restless night like that, please send your thoughts out to the Universe for me to come and be by your side! I will be there in but a moment to soothe your fevered brow and sprinkle you with some fairy dust. You will slip comfortably into a deep and peaceful sleep where beautiful dreams are your reality.

Always remember, you have Earth Angel at your service!

Sweet Dreams,
EA

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5 posted 2003-04-25 09:47 AM


Morning Seymour  
it does sound as though you didn't sleep
very well. I hate bad dreams. Some of them
seem to linger on in your mind, don't they?
I'm glad to see, though, that your bad dreams
didn't keep you from writing a beautiful poem
for us this morning. Thank you.     
Hugs,
Ethel

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2003-04-25 10:20 AM


It was the clouds in angry pass
Like gray and shifting chutney glass
Stirring up an ill will chill
That gave my mind a spirits rill.

It slowed my muse and drift of night
I could not catch the midnight flight
And lay there in a restless wait
A colored amber thinking state

This moment chalked a spirits wave
A ghost had walked across my grave.


==================================

Well, gratefully, I never have to wait to read a poem that makes me smile at your writer's wile.Take another bow me sweet Stinky for this is cooler than cool and teaches the poetic golden rule.  


How can one not smile at your Sy-style with clever lines like these....

Like gray and shifting chutney glass

Stirring up an ill will chill

I could not catch the midnight flight

A colored amber thinking state

This moment chalked a spirits wave



cadence kissed couplets of waaay cool...
and I?  I am your Tinkerbell winkie fool




regards2you
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7 posted 2003-04-25 11:11 AM




Sy,

Well I am glad this one lingered on your mind....great poetry...enjoyed!

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

junemac
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8 posted 2003-04-25 11:28 AM


hello sy,
i am just new here but oh how i loved this poem and especially the ending. i am already a fan

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2003-04-25 12:56 PM


Tim
Thank you for the read my friend.

Nancy,
Always nice to have tea with you.

Chris,
What ever you serve is delicious. hugs

Earth Angel
I could use some of that angel dust on my computer right now. It's giving me more trouble then I know what to do with. LOL
But if I'm allowed I'll send you hugs.

Ethel
Hugs back and thank you for your tea and sympathy.

JM,
You are my one and only Tinkerbell.
WWRS

Pat,
Thank you sweet, Hugs.

junemac,
I love fans LOL thank you so much.


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10 posted 2003-04-25 09:55 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Seymour, this is heartfelt, sweet friend, I always go to sleep early in the morning as I don't want to be left alone in the night and want to be acquainted with it! (sigh) Hope you get good rest tonight, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

      
Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

Duncan
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11 posted 2003-04-25 11:19 PM


'It was the clouds in angry pass
Like gray and shifting chutney glass
Stirring up an ill will chill
That gave my mind a spirits rill.'

Chutney glass...love that Sy.  Often miss the flight myself.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (04-25-2003 11:21 PM).]

Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2003-04-25 11:38 PM


Boah,
My good friend, thank you.

Duncan,
Not too many I hope, LOL

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