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Seraphine
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0 posted 2003-04-24 09:28 PM



He
He took my hand, and I,
I trembled through each promise his body made to mine
and He...like Neptune rising from the thunderous seas of his soul.....
dove into my ocean of dreams......freeing me and I, I never wanted to open my eyes
And then He took my heart, and I,
I melted into his private eternity of a moment stopped in time
and He.....like Mercury....lightening swift....delivering his message...
swept me away.......keeping me close and I, I was delivered and saved
And He, he shrouded me in melting heaven.....and I, I was standing still but with fire burning through the inside out...and He...like Zephyros....blew cooling breath back into me....and I, I was quietly enraptured in He


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Nightshade
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1 posted 2003-04-24 09:33 PM





Enjoyed your first post !!
Chris

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2 posted 2003-04-24 09:34 PM


Enjoyed this,  love the interplay of
characters and the way HE took you through


welcome to Passions,  a pleasure to read
this.

whiskey
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3 posted 2003-04-24 09:34 PM


Very nice, well written first post Welcome to passions. Look forward to reading more from you


Julie

Seraphine
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4 posted 2003-04-24 09:36 PM


Thank you so much guys I started writing about four years ago and I really love it. It is a great way to let feelings out and hopefully touch someone else in some way. If anyone would like to chat more and share work look me up on yahoo under the nick survivingsunset. Would love to hear from you!

Thanks again,
Amber

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5 posted 2003-04-24 09:41 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Much enjoyed your first post.
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Kielo
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6 posted 2003-04-24 10:22 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
This was an amazing poem. Excellent. I very much liked it.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

Seraphine
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7 posted 2003-04-24 10:46 PM


Thanks again Kielo! I really appreciate it. I have always loved to write pretty much anything from short stories to research papers I know I know, crazy huh! Dylan Thomas inspired me to try my hand at it. There is no piece of poetry that better expresses my view on living than "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Goodnight".

Look forward to reading your work,
Amber

Sunshine
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8 posted 2003-04-24 11:13 PM


Welcome to Passions...I,
I think that you are going to enjoy,
enjoy very much, Passions, and all,
all that it has to offer...because I sincerely like the way you write...and I know you're going to find a crew of folk that enjoy what you have to say....

Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?

Seraphine
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9 posted 2003-04-24 11:15 PM


Thank you again Sunshine! I am really happy to find a place I can read others' work and post some of my own.. I look forward to reading your work.

Amber

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10 posted 2003-04-25 11:40 AM


WELCOME!
I enjoyed your first post, hope to read more soon.

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11 posted 2003-04-25 01:48 PM




(smiles) Yay! Oh my gosh, this is a celestially and rapturous debut, sweet friend, and may you always find light and comfort in love and the Holy Spirit, yay! Welcome to Passions, sweet Seraphine, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seraphine, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery.

***Shakira***

nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2003-04-25 02:49 PM


a very lovely first post...I am short on words today or I would give you a better "Welcome"

M

junemac
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13 posted 2003-04-25 02:59 PM


oh how wonderful !!!!!!! i loved it. your writing is special.


hugs from june x

ps, i am new too :0)

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2003-04-25 06:07 PM


Some terrific images in your writing here.

Enjoyed muchly

Welcome to Passions Seraphine!

Brad Majors
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15 posted 2003-04-25 06:25 PM


welcome and very well done piece!
time2shine
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16 posted 2003-04-25 06:55 PM


He, can do those things. Love all the passion.
Seraphine
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17 posted 2003-05-13 01:41 AM


Hello everyone Thank you so very much for such a wonderful response from everyone! Sincerely sorry it has taken me so long to reply. I have moved cities and we all know how that can be! I look forward to sharing work with all of you.

Take care of yourselves,

Amber

Nan
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18 posted 2003-05-13 07:02 AM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry, Amber - This is a wonderful place to share your work - and yours has a very unique ambience about it - I'm looking forward to reading more...
Rick
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19 posted 2003-05-13 07:19 AM


Amber, enjoyed this very much, welcome to Passions, I am sure you will have fun with this family of friends.

Sincerely
Rick

Kit McCallum
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20 posted 2003-05-13 07:23 AM


What a lovely flow to this piece, Amber. I'm looking forward to reading more from you.  Welcome to Passions!

Best wishes,
/Kit

littlewing
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21 posted 2003-05-14 01:38 AM


Seraphine:

nice entrance
you will love it here
Welcome to PIP!

xxoo

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