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junemac
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0 posted 2003-04-24 05:29 PM




Like a child


go wild, like a child,
hide and giggle til it hurts,
run so fast the wind cant catch you,
and eat pudding til you burst.

make daisy chains in the field,
see dragon clouds in the sky,
crush rose petals to make fairy juice,
and serve teddy bears mud pies.

like a child catch the moment,
wring the happiness from each day,
dont worry if you graze a knee,
the pain will be kissed away

the grown up world can wait a while,
there,s nothing there to envy,
be a child as often as you can,
and the world wont get so heavy.

© Copyright 2003 june macfarlane - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2003-04-24 05:36 PM


"make daisy chains in the field,
see dragon clouds in the sky,
crush rose petals to make fairy juice,
and serve teddy bears mud pies."


Wonderful!! I enjoyed this light-hearted read so much today!
My favourite stanza?  The one above!
~Hugs & Giggles, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Kethry
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2 posted 2003-04-24 05:43 PM


beautifully lighthearted, but a spell and grammer check wouldn't go astray.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



junemac
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3 posted 2003-04-24 06:22 PM


thank you kethry and nancy. this is my first poem on here and i appreciate your comments very much. kethry thanks for pointing out the grammat point, i am terrible sometimes and will have to take more care. i am not sure what you mean about the spelling though, as i thought it was correct.

hugs'n'stuff x june x

Mary Ann
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4 posted 2003-04-24 07:39 PM


I like your poem a lot It has a bright, cheerful feel to it and it's great to break free every now and then and pretend you're not an adult..

Hugs,
Mary Ann

Startime55
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5 posted 2003-04-24 07:42 PM


Catch a falling star and make a wish for the magic of belief could make it come true....In many ways I still have the heart of a child and believe anything is possible...I LOVE THIS POEM...
junemac
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6 posted 2003-04-25 04:19 PM


thank you startime and mary ann,
i am thrilled that you have taken the time to read and comment on my poem.
:0)

hugs n stuff from june x

passing shadows
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7 posted 2003-05-25 04:55 AM



QjQ
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8 posted 2003-05-25 06:12 PM


nicely written and thought  

QjQ

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