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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-04-23 11:33 PM

You were nervous about this
Your debut

Though we had rehearsed your part
again and again
to ready you

You were equally
elated and anxious
about opening night

But finally,
we began the performance

With you costumed
in befitting white silks
and ill-fitting concern

The curtains parted
and I saw you illuminated
Bright
in the wash of my gaze

And noticed
That first, and only hint
of apprehension,
of your stage fright

I then set about my directorial duties
putting you through your paces
Cajoling, when you needed it
Stern, when you wanted it

Bending you to my will
to distract you
from my plunging past the barrier
that stifled your expression

Sighing your assertion
Then, letting loose your passion
elicited my own reaction

Your eyes widened
at my growled ovation.

[This message has been edited by wranx (04-24-2003 07:19 AM).]

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-04-23 11:44 PM

Must have been some show!
What a brilliant script.

And the award goes to.....you!

I've got a movie poem in the making,
but ummmmm, I think I'll save it!

This was absolutely delightful wranx~

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

2 posted 2003-04-23 11:46 PM

What a wonderful poem....A standing ovation to you Wranx!!! I do enjoy your writing!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

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Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

3 posted 2003-04-23 11:50 PM

Think I want to borrow that script....

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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

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usa

4 posted 2003-04-24 10:37 AM

fine bit of set-building here

Martie

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California

5 posted 2003-04-24 10:39 AM

Wranx......Bravo!!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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6 posted 2003-04-24 10:41 AM

(chuckling)... Ed... now as the director you know proper preperation and planning is everything.... sounds as if the debut went well...

Enjoyed... and sounds as if you did.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2003-04-24 10:42 AM

Bravo!! and Encore!!
Wonderful performance!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

8 posted 2003-04-24 10:45 AM

Encore - Oh the picture now in my head.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-04-24 10:49 AM

Curtain call...please!

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

10 posted 2003-04-24 11:36 AM

hmmm . . . a director - fits you well

I loved this . . . *smiling*
Beautiful writing Ed - but then again
it always is
xxoo

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

11 posted 2003-04-24 11:41 AM

There is nothing like a "growl" from the director to take away the stage fright. lol.
I so enjoy the way that you toy and tease with your words. Bravo!! Chris