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dreambuilder
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caddyshack

0 posted 2003-04-23 09:19 PM



The jagged razors edge of reality
Where I dance at times
Flirting with fantasy
Daring disaster

A place of freedom
Displaying my darkness
Enticing insanity
Exposing my soul

Finding myself
What I fear most
is what I have become...

An abyss within humanity

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream  . . .

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QjQ
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1 posted 2003-04-23 10:01 PM


nicely thought and written
BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-04-23 10:03 PM


That's dancing a fine line, and you've written it well.

Humanity is good natured once we learn to live with it.

Enjoyed your honest thoughts dreambuilder.

whiskey
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3 posted 2003-04-23 10:15 PM


Very nice, I enjoyed this much.

Julie

garysgirl
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4 posted 2003-04-23 10:18 PM


MTS, this seems to be an honest write.
I like that.

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

littlewing
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5 posted 2003-04-24 05:33 PM


dream:

far from darkness - I see beautiful
light shining through your words

An abyss in humanity . . .
how I feel most days

Amazing write
You are punching your way through
these pages!
xxoo

dreambuilder
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6 posted 2003-04-24 09:05 PM


thank you for the sweet replies

[This message has been edited by dreambuilder (04-24-2003 09:09 PM).]

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
7 posted 2003-04-24 09:10 PM


Dream you know i know this, great write as usual
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