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Martie
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0 posted 2003-04-23 07:16 PM


Just the slightest tease of sky
I feel in morning cloak of seam
a humbled lash against the true
of pewter day locked out for dream

Can't I stay here one more kiss
a float in lavender air to breathe
the mist all twisted in tidal whirl
poured on pillow I'm soaked unfurled

The sky is stitched with magic now
where every butterfly's a dream
and every dream bound outward
seeking desperately a world

And yet one kiss is all that matters
one kiss to hold, an amulet,
a charm against the parting,
and a share of us unsold

Until tomorrow or a turn of time
and dream when dreams return
to rest, to stay, to find the sun
and to be captured, free.

[This message has been edited by Martie (04-23-2003 07:17 PM).]

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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1 posted 2003-04-23 07:31 PM


A wonderful duet you two.
Especially liked the flow of piece, just as the pause after the last kiss...
TD

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2 posted 2003-04-23 07:33 PM


The two of you have created a masterpiece...this is beautiful...
Dr.Moose1
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3 posted 2003-04-23 07:52 PM


Martie/Ed,
Applause, applause! Watch out you two, if I can ever figure out how to break with my structured forms and delve into writing with pure emotion, I will still be way behind you, but gaining fast.
Doc

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4 posted 2003-04-23 07:56 PM


This duet works for me! Enjoyed the shared intimacy of conjoined pens!

Hugs & kudos to you both!
EA

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5 posted 2003-04-23 08:23 PM


Just the slightest tease of sky
I feel in morning cloak of seam
a humbled lash against the true
of pewter day locked out for dream

Can't I stay here one more kiss
a float in lavender air to breathe
the mist all twisted in tidal whirl
poured on pillow I'm soaked unfurled

The sky is stitched with magic now
where every butterfly's a dream
and every dream bound outward
seeking desperately a world
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my oh my oh my...talk about rhymes divine..
this is pure poetry in motion..what a delight this was to read aloud..
It must be read aloud to do its cadenced grace justice!!
very lovely you two...your pens should dance like this more often.

You're the best I've ever felt ...
it's so wrong not to be with you.
It's getting harder to stay away,
it stops my heart just to be with you.

SH

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6 posted 2003-04-23 08:51 PM



Martie and Ed,

Well, Janet said it best.

Oh, this is just wonderful...
Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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7 posted 2003-04-23 10:05 PM


Thank you, folks..... and Martie, it was truly a pleasure. You make it easy.

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8 posted 2003-04-23 10:07 PM


a charm against the parting,
and a share of us unsold

Wowser!
Once again, this was very nice duetting you two~



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9 posted 2003-04-23 10:12 PM


Yep, and my next assignment is to work on actually getting that smooch....!

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Martie
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10 posted 2003-04-23 10:22 PM


Thanks for the replies...and Ed is the one that makes it easy...a wonderful poet, and friend...thanks for dueting with me again.  
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11 posted 2003-04-23 10:45 PM


Brilliant duet they're seemless and beautiful great work you two
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12 posted 2003-04-23 10:49 PM


What a perfectly beautiful duet you two!!
You blend wonderfully together...Brava!!
~Smiles & Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sunshine
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13 posted 2003-04-24 06:49 AM



I love sitting next to...
wonderful...
so duet again, soon...
please?

Margherita
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14 posted 2003-04-24 07:20 AM


So lovely and full of grace.
Love, Margherita

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15 posted 2003-04-24 09:29 AM


very nicely done... in harmony and in tune the words do seem to be seamless...

I enjoyed!

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16 posted 2003-04-24 10:23 AM


Martie and Ed~
Such graceful beauty that comes from gracious inkwells~

This is lovely you two !
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Bill Charles
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17 posted 2003-04-24 10:29 AM


Martie - you two write well together. Everything blends very well...

BC

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18 posted 2003-04-24 12:52 PM


Yeah, Bill, but not well enough, alas......you'll notice that the lady studiously avoided my last comment....sigh....

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Sudhir Iyer
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19 posted 2003-04-24 01:00 PM


Great great work... loved it...

regards,
sudhir

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20 posted 2003-04-24 03:27 PM


The sky is stitched with magic now
where every butterfly's a dream
and every dream bound outward
seeking desperately a world

And yet one kiss is all that matters
one kiss to hold, an amulet,
a charm against the parting,
and a share of us unsold

Oh, yes. *S* The sky isn't the only thing stitched with magic... this seamless weaving of your talents simply sparkles. *S*

Please keep partnering (at least poetically *G*)... your dance is liquid gold. *S*

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21 posted 2003-04-24 04:18 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie and Ed, this is a beautiful duet, sweet friend, I know this feeling of how every kiss should be cherished like a keepsake as I long for my first kiss and want to feel the same way! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friends, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Ed and Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery.

***Shakira***

Martie
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22 posted 2003-04-26 11:53 PM


Ed..........SMOOCH!!!
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23 posted 2003-04-27 12:02 PM


Mmmmmmmmm.......mission accomplished!



....ready for next assignment.....

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24 posted 2003-04-27 12:48 PM


Can't I stay here one more kiss
a float in lavender air to breathe
the mist all twisted in tidal whirl
poured on pillow I'm soaked unfurled

The sky is stitched with magic now
where every butterfly's a dream
and every dream bound outward
seeking desperately a world


Oh yes, dear friends, a kiss certainly can be magical. I love this. You two should do this more often.  

Hugs to you both,     
Ethel

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