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holding the sun in my palms
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holding the sun in my palms |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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on my own and holding the sun in the palms of my hands in the most naïve way feeling sharp pain in blisters left behind well, I have been wintered for longer than time and I’d probably do anything for some warmth even if the warm is actually hot so that emptiness breaks its knots have been imprisoned by feeling of alone for far too long I'm aching to be free yet yearning to be bound by a pair of embracing arms for loneliness is a creep and the price of such a soul is cheap and dirty like water during floods like tears in the rain like gold devalued to dust it is time, like they say to play with wild fire if for nothing but re-ignite the desire to love and be loved to hold the sun in my palms and kiss the sharp tip of the poisoned dart [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (04-23-2003 05:53 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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luvlorn322 Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 43 |
Wonderful expression of the conflict that is love, thanks for sharing. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Absolutely lovely Sudi! Maree  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all very much my dear friends... your words are much appreciated... regards, sudhir |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
nice. A strong write, with a fine use of surrealism for visual effect. Stanza's two and three are as a "shrug" of self explanation, which is on it's own would seem almost apologetic, but with the closing stanzas, there is a sense of fatalism--of embracing destiny no matter what it may be, that underscores determination, with an almost whimsy of recklessness, but coupled with emotional fortitude. Smile. Yep. I got all that out of it. Hugs, Sudhir! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! So well done Sudhir!! And quite the nip at the end! Much enjoyed the read m'friend. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
have been imprisoned by feeling of alone for far too long I'm aching to be free yet yearning to be bound by a pair of embracing arms for loneliness is a creep and the price of such a soul is cheap and dirty like water during floods like tears in the rain like gold devalued to dust it is time, like they say to play with wild fire if for nothing but re-ignite the desire to love and be loved to hold the sun in my palms This part my friend could stand alone as a poem in itself... may you find the twine of arms and the tie of hearts...and may alone.. be something you only remember. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is wonderful, sweet friend, sadly love has these situations always and I don't want to get burned either, I guess you shouldn't hold the sun but rather fondle it! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton And that's the most wonderful thing about creating. It will always be a mystery. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir Time moves so slowly when one is lonely, that to even burn for a minute seems better. Wishing you warmth and the pleasure it brings, soon. Poem emotive and well done!  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karen, hugs to you too my friend... you are a rare gem thank youNancy, your words are much appreciated, my friend... thank you Ron, thank you in all earnest... very muchly... Noah, your kind heart shows no boundaries... thanks... Martie, thank you so very much... Regards to all, Sudhir |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sudhir: have I told you that you are brilliant! I'm aching to be free yet yearning to be bound by a pair of embracing arms Exactly! amazing write here xxoo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Your viewpoint and your imagery are utterly unique, and so striking that one image of yours (the dart) may have entered my thought vocabulary permanently. This is a fine poem, and I hope you find a way to publish it outside PIP as well. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sudhir, it appears to me that you would be one to learn how to hold the sun safely. This is brilliant writing, good sir  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Dear friends, I thank you very much for your much appreciated responses... You are too kind... Regards, Sudhir |
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